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—The Last Leaf
A Continuation of a Story
Unit 8 Literature
Writingworkshop
Learning objectives
analyze the story’s main elements.
learn the skills on continuation writing.
apply what you have learnt to the Continuation Writing.
learn and appreciate the possible story ending.
At the end of this class,I can
You are going to write a continuation of the story The Last Leaf.
Writing Task
where
who
what
why /how
in Greenwich Village
Johnsy ,Sue
and Behrman
Johnsy had fallen ill and was dying of pneumonia
Mr.Behrman painted the last leaf and he died
when
in November
Task1: Read for the basic information.
RisingAction
Climax
Task 2 :Reread the story and figure out the plot.
Climax
RisingAction
In November, Johnsy ___________________.
The doctor said . z
got sick with pneumonia
she might not get better
She counted the ______ out
the window. She thought she must go when the last leaf ____
leaves
fell
Figure out the plot.
Falling
Action
Continuation
The doctor ____________________________. Mr Behrman____________________
said she would live and get better
was sick with pneumonia
Behrman and Sue looked out the window and found ___________.The next morning Johnsy ________________________
one leaf left
saw the leaf was still there.
The next day, Mr Behrman _____. The last leaf was painted by Mr. Behrman.
died
Climax
Johnsy survived and ...
Figure out the plot.
Climax
RisingAction
Jhonsy was ill.
Johnsy counted the leaves outside.
There was only one leaf outside the window.
The following day, the last leaf was still there. Johnsy survived.Mr behrmandied
What happened to Johnsy
Why did she became a famous painter
The plot
Continuation
Characters Personality Examples (Evidence)
Johnsy pessimistic stubborn waited to die; mind was made up
Sue considerate kind, patient encouraged Johnsy constantly and took care of Johnsy carefully
Behrman ambitious selfless brave For forty years he had been about to paint a masterpiece.
He sacrificed his life to saveJohnsy.
Analyse the characters
characterization
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.________________________________________
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. _______________________________
Writing Task
對段首語進行分析、設問。
兩個段首語是重要的續寫提示，控制著情節的發展方向。對其分析設問，能夠將預測的故事情節以問題的形式呈現，利于打開思路，整理信息和組織語言。
Task 3: Analyse the two given sentences
Para 1: Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes , as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her
Para 2: Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
Why did she cry
What was her feeling？
What would she say
What would she do when she realized her dream
How did she feel when remembered the past
What was Mr.Behrman’s influence on her paintings
→ Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word and promised that from today on, she will put all her heart and soul into painting.
What did she do for Mr.Behrman
Para.1 .Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Q2：What did she do
Q1：What were her feelings
Went to see Mr.Behrman immediately and said goodbye to him.
Q3：What would she say to Mr.Behrman
surprised, heartbroken,and grateful
Expressing her deep gratitude and told her future dream
Task4: Develop the plots
feelings
words
behaviors
Para.2 Para.2.Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
Q1:What would she do when she realized her dream
Q3:What was Mr.Behrman’s influence on her paintings
Q2: How did she feel when remembered thepast
Return to the Greenwich Village .
Recall the old times and felt moved again
Keep him in mind and made his dream come true.
Feelings
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
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列大綱：兩段12句法
1） 2） 3）
4） 5） 6）
7） 8） 9）
10） 11） 12）
列大綱：兩段12句法
1）固定 2） 3）
4） 5） 6）固定
7）固定 8） 9）
10） 11） 12）固定
結局/升華主旨
承接首段首句
承接二段首句
承啟二段首句
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
列大綱：兩段12句法
1） 2） 3）
4） 5） 6
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
Johnsy cried
She decided to see Behrman
She saw Behrman
She said goodbye to him
She expressed gratitude
She promised
“In November, a cold, unseen stranger, whom the doctors called Pneumonia, arrived in Greenwich Villiage.”(para.2)
“I want to go sailing down, down, just like one of those poor, tired leaves.”(para.6)
“Johnsy’s eyes were open, but they weren’t watching her. Instead, she stared ot the window and counted backwards:’Ten, nine, eight, seven...’”(para.4)
“Didn’t you wonder why it never moved an inch when the wind blew Ah, dear, it’s Behrman’s masterpiece...”(para.13)
personification
the vividness of details
simile & personification
the sursprising but logical ending
Writing styles of O.Henry
hints:
simile (明喻)
personification(擬人)
the vividness of details
(生動的細節描寫)
the surprising but logical ending
(驚人但合邏輯的結局)
say: claim, ask, reply, cry, tell
see: look, watch, stare, notice
die: go, go sailing down, go away, slip away
How does the writer use different words to express similar meanings in the story
variety in language
Wonderful expressions and beautiful sentences
Expressions:
1. Vivid words & various expressions
（生動的詞/多樣的表達）
2. Verbs in action（表動作的詞）
3. Varied sentence patterns（句式多樣）
4. Plots corresponding to the given passage（情節緊扣）
5. Proper statement of the theme（主題升華恰當）
寫句式 招招升級
招式1：名詞性從句
常見句型：What was surprised was that...
招式2：“so ... that ...”
因果關系邏輯強，動作情緒全包含，想更高級也容易，so提前變成倒裝 。
招式3： 完全倒裝
表示時間、地點、方位的介詞或副詞置于句首時，使用完全倒裝 結構，即“謂語動詞+主語”
招式4： 強調句 “It was ... that/who ...”
寫句式 招招升級
招式5： 虛擬語氣
常用句式：Without.../But for..., Sb. could/couldn’t have done...
招式6： 非謂語動詞
常用句式： ① ...,doing ② Doing… ③ Having done..., ...
招式7： 定語從句
“先行詞n. + who/that .... ”
招式8： 無靈主語
招式9： 動作鏈
Para Surroundings 環境 Events 事件 Places 地點 Emotions
情緒
1
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.________________________________________
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. _______________________________
Task5: Composing
讀后續寫的高考評分標準
評分標準：
1.本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。
2.評分時，先根據所續寫內容和語言（詞匯語法、篇章結構）等考慮。
（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；
（2）內容的合理性；
（3）應用語法結構和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；
（4）上下文的連貫性；
3.先根據作答的整體情況確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調整檔次，最后給分。
4. 評分時還應注意：
（1）拼寫與標點符號是寫作規范的重要方面，評分時應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮，英美拼寫均可接受；
5. 書寫較差，以至影響交際，可將分數降低一個檔次；
6. 詞數少于130的，從總分中減去2分。
v
使用多樣化的語法結構，使用高級詞匯表達，并在此基礎上保證準確性。
力爭“升檔”，嚴防“掉檔”
續寫內容與所給段首句和短文有合理的銜接。
保證所寫情節的合理性
有效地使用語句間的連接成分，短文結構緊湊。
有最低字數要求，但無明確上限，建議不超過180詞
拼寫、標點及試卷的整潔度會影響整體得分。
Para.1 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and staring at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy couldn’t help crying sadly. Although she was too weak to sit up and move around, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy got out of bed and went downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy whispered to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life and I promise that I will continue my painting.”
A simple version
Para.1Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and gazing at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy could not contain herself any longer and broke into tears. In fragile health as she was, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy struggled out of bed and shuffled downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman, the poor old painter, lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word. After what seemed like ages, she held back her tears and murmured to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life. I promise that from today on, I will put all my heart and soul into painting.”
Advanced version
1.Polish Para1.
2.Finish Para2 and polish it.
Homework
列大綱：兩段12句法
1） 2） 3）
4） 5） 6
7 8） 9）
10） 11） 12
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
Johnsy cried
She decided to see Behrman
She saw Behrman
She said goodbye to him
She expressed gratitude
She promised
Her paintings were popular
She returned
She saw the leaf
She recalled the times
She finished the drawing
The last leaf is the hope
Para.2Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were widely admired and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. When she opened the window and saw the leaf on the wall, she decided it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had longed to produce. In the painting, a leaf held firmly onto the dry branches in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy smiled broadly. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.
Paragraph2. Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were highly acclaimed and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. It was the first time she set her foot in the house after she left ten years ago. When she opened the window and caught sight of the leaf on the wall, she knew it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had been longing to produce all these years. In the painting, a leaf clung firmly to the dry branches swaying in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy gave a broad smile on her face. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.
列大綱：兩段12句法
1） 2） 3）
4） 5） 6）
7）固定 8） 9）
10） 11） 12）
Johnsy --surprised, sad,grateful
would value life and
devote to painting
struggled to get up
supported by Sue,went to visit Mr. Behrman
Mr. Behrman was lying on the bed
showed gratutide to him
結局/升華主旨
承接二段首句

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