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高考英語讀后續寫
閱卷心得
目 錄
01
試題分析
CONTENTS
02
評分標準
03
答題反饋
04
備考建議
PART 01
試題分析
PART ONE
01
02
試題分析
語言
流暢，地道
情境
真實，具體
03
人性
寬容，和諧
04
育人
以“文”化人
讀后續寫-淋濕的親情
真題速遞
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn't counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece's small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise --- a shock, actually: "Not a chance." Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良 心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意：1、續寫詞數應為150個左右；2、請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I realized it was me who was at fault.
Paragraph 2: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
原文：注重真實情境的創設，作者在家庭聚會中由于不滿兄弟的狗而引發嫌隙的情境，貼近學生生活。以真實情境為依托，易于引起考生共鳴。讓學生在代入感強烈的情境中自由發揮，充分展現其想象力和創造力。 —情境載體
續寫部分：綜合考查考生“讀+寫”的語言技能。考生在理解語篇的基礎上，運用所積累的語言知識進行有效的文字表達。體現續寫段落的協同性，流暢性和合理性。情節推理要有邏輯性，連貫性，創新性，從而體現考生的邏輯思維能力和創新思維能力。是對他們語言能力和思維品質的考查。--能力素養
續寫結尾：隨著語篇情節的推進，結尾旨在提示學生遵循著中華傳統中“推己及人”“以和為貴 ”的思路進行續寫，引導學生培養寬容的美好品德。培養學生的真善美。將德育貫徹于教學始終--核心價值
試題來源 真題來源于Amy Newmark Chicken Soup forthe Soul: 101 Waysto Think Positive
語篇長度 313詞
主題語境 人與社會,人與自我，人與自然
語篇內容 “我”因擔心哥哥活潑的愛犬破壞家庭聚會，拒絕讓狗進屋。晚飯后下雨，哥哥被迫攜愛犬冒雨離開。兄弟倆心生芥蒂，冷戰數月。經妻子提醒，并設身處地想到哥哥正經歷喪妻之痛，且健康狀況不佳，而狗是哥哥的重要精神支柱，終于意識到自己行為不妥。他放下自尊，攜餅干登門真誠道歉，兄弟和解。
育人價值 該語篇突出了我”的“規則”與哥哥的“情感需求”之間的沖突。續寫需要解決這一沖突，修復兄弟情感裂痕。引導學生重視親情、家人之間的理解與寬容，培養同理心及設身處地為他人著想的美好品德，實屬“德育”滲透的典范試題。
命題趨勢
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: my brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn't want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.

黃底為1星詞，藍底為2星詞，紅底為非標詞，未標為初中詞匯
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: my brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn't want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.

黃底為1星詞，藍底為2星詞，紅底為非標詞，未標為初中詞匯
A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues, and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意:
(1) 續寫詞數應為150左右；
(2) 請按如下格式在答題紙相應位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
詞匯占比 特點歸納
初中詞 295詞 約占比95%
1星詞 9詞 約占比3% 2星詞 4詞 約占比1% 非標詞 3詞 （1個標漢語， 2個未標漢語） 約占0.96比% 原文詞數 311詞 （不含給出句） 第一段給出句9詞，第二段給出句13詞，共333詞。 高比例基礎詞匯決定了語言的“質樸平實”，1星詞和2星詞多為情感或動作類關鍵詞，在基礎詞匯框架中精準勾勒心理活動與場景動態，避免語言過于平淡。續寫時需緊扣這一詞匯特征，確保語言風格的高度協同。
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: my brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn't want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.

sth.
使某事井然有序；
將某事安排妥當
預料到；考慮到；想到
（喻）精力充沛、充滿激情的人
撞倒
出現，到場
進展順利
來來回回
對…… 高興；
對…… 感到滿意
強行解決問題；
迫使事情有個結果
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues, and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意:
(1) 續寫詞數應為150左右；
(2) 請按如下格式在答題紙相應位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
根本沒機會；
不可能；想都別想
從（挫折、失望等）中恢復過來
與某人取得聯系
oneself
one’s
換位思考；
設身處地為他人著想
去世
sb.
使某人堅持下去
語言
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn't counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece's small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside. My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise --- a shock, actually: "Not a chance." Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良 心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意：1、續寫詞數應為150個左右；2、請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I realized it was me who was at fault.
Paragraph 2: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
狀語從句
非謂語
擬人
同位語從句+定語從句
無靈主語
副詞
定語從句
無靈主語
真題所用詞匯均較為常見，并無生僻詞出現；因此學生也要避免使用較高級、較生僻的詞匯。真題中的句式結構較為多樣，學生在續寫時也應盡可能使用倒裝句、分詞作狀語、with 的復合結構、從句等句式結構。
析真題探規律
年份 續寫內容 續寫主題 敘述人稱 問題場景 主角身份
2025 家庭矛盾和親情修復 換位思考，手足親情 第一人稱 家庭 成年人
2024 準守承諾支付打車費 誠實守信，契約精神 第一人稱 社會 出國開會的社會人士
2023 在老師的鼓勵下參加英語寫作比賽 自我堅持，感恩老師的鼓勵 第一人稱 校園 學生
2022 患有腦疾的David參加越野賽 克服困難，堅持到底 第一人稱 校園 特殊教育老師
2021 雙胞胎在母親節給母親準備早餐 感恩母親付出 第三人稱 家庭 青少年
穩中有變
主題深度與廣度拓展
2024新課標I卷讀后續寫，圍繞信任與契約精神展開，主題聚焦人際交往中的誠信品德，較為貼近生活實際場景。而2025全國I卷，讀后續寫講述作者在家庭聚會與兄弟產生矛盾，之后主動反思并決定道歉，主題上升到家庭關系處理、自我成長以及承擔責任與寬容品質培養層面。這意味著讀后續寫主題從單一的人際交往誠信，拓展到家庭關系、個人成長等更廣泛且深入的領域，對學生情感認知、生活感悟以及價值觀理解深度要求更高需要學生具備從多角度思考主題、挖掘深層內涵的能力。
情節構建與邏輯推理要求提升
在2024年題目中，給定文本人物關系相對簡單，邏輯線索明晰，學生較易依據已有情節推斷續寫方向，續寫只需順著信任與守約思路即可。但2025全國一卷中，家庭聚會矛盾涉及復雜人物情感，兄弟間矛盾產生原因、過往相處細節等都需深入挖掘。從矛盾產生到作者決定道歉，中間心理變化過程、行為動機等邏輯鏈條要完整且合理構建。
語言表達豐富度與精準度要求提高
2024年對續寫語言要求多是能清晰表述情節，語法正確，運用常見詞匯和簡單句式即可。然而在2025全國一卷中，對語言表達要求大幅提升。在描述人物情感、動作、心理時，需要運用更豐富多樣詞匯和高級句式。比如描寫作者決定道歉前的糾結心理，不能僅用“I was very worried"這樣簡單表述，而是像“A sense of hesitation and anxiety overwhelmed me, as I repeatedly weighed the pros and cons of makingthe first move"運用overwhelm(使不知所措)、weigh the pros and cons(權衡利弊)等高級詞匯和as引導原因狀語從句，使表達更生動、精準，更能細膩展現人物復雜心理。在2025年續寫中，無論是刻畫人物形象，還是推動情節發展，都需通過高質量語言表達，展現學生扎實語言功底。
總之，高考的“變”與“不變”是辯證的對立統一。2025年高考英語試題續寫的總體特點可以概括為:守正但求穩定，創新以求發展。“穩定”是高考的“不變”，是為了保證長期以來一直堅持的英語綜合考查的基礎性和綜合性，“發展”是高考的“變”，集中體現了英語綜合考查的創新性和應用性。
PART 02
評分標準
PART TWO
評分標準
1. 本題總分為25分，按五個檔次進行評分。
2. 評分時，應從內容、詞匯語法和語篇結構三個方面考慮，具體為：
(1)續寫內容的質量、完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。
(2)所使用詞匯和語法結構的準確性，恰當性和多樣性。
(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。
3. 評分時，應先根據作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來綜合衡量，確定或調整檔次，最后給分。
4. 評分時還應注意：
(1)詞數少于120的，酌情扣分；
(2)書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分；
(3)單詞拼寫和標點符號是寫作規范的重要方面，評分時應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮，英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。
評分原則
1-5分:續寫不完整，與原文情境基本脫節，且內容或邏輯上有較多重大問題，錯誤很多，嚴重影響理解。（一塌糊涂：未作答；幾個單詞的堆砌；所寫內容為所背誦無關句子的堆砌；全部抄自原文且只有一兩句為原創句子。）
6-10分:續寫不夠完整，與原文情境有一定程度脫節，且內容或邏輯上有些重大問題，錯誤較多，影響理解。（支離破碎：結構和情節混亂的大前提是有部分情節和句子結構，但是東扯一句西扯一句且句子沒有主謂意識。）
11-15分:續寫基本完整，與原文情境相關，且內容基本合理，有一定的邏輯性;使用了簡單的詞匯和語法結構，出現一些錯誤，但基本不影響理解;銜接基本有效，語意基本連貫。（馬馬虎虎：有可讀性，可以都為簡單句，但是有三分之二的句式正確，有主謂意識。）
16-20分:續寫比較完整，與原文情境比較一致，內容比較豐富合理，且比較有邏輯性;使用了比較多樣、恰當的詞匯和語法結構，出現些許小錯但不影響理解;銜接較有效，語意較連貫。（干干凈凈：允許有個別語法錯誤，允許有個別情節突兀的地方。）
21-25分:續寫完整，與原文情境一致，內容豐富合理，且富有邏輯性;使用了多樣、恰當的詞匯和語法結構，出現個別小錯，但完全不影響理解;銜接有效，語意連貫。（漂漂亮亮：行云流水，舒服自然，協同性強。）
PART 03
答題反饋
PART THREE
寫作思路
可從情節入手，寫回憶兄弟離開時的黯然傷神；也可從情感入手，寫兄弟妻子去世之后，狗成了兄弟的精神寄托，也可寫我的后悔。妻子出場，承上啟下；升華點為共情、換位思考、手足親情彌足珍貴等。
常規思路
第一段大篇幅詳述做餅干的過程，也可接受，但要酌情減分。
非常規思路2
第一段我再次給弟弟打電話道歉，獲取了原諒，他邀請我們去他家做客；第二段再次道歉，有些考生寫到餅干是給狗狗準備的。
非常規思路1
考生在第一段的結尾沒有提到餅干，只要提及要去弟弟家登門道歉這個意向就可以，可以是去超市買了其他的禮物。
非常規思路3
寫作思路
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鼓勵多元思維：引導學生從不同角度思考問題，想出多種情節可能發展方向。
避免思維定勢和套路化：防止學生陷入常見的情節套路，鼓勵他們創造獨特的、個性化的情節，展現自己的想象力和創造力。我們在教學中要打破學生的經驗主義和思維定式。
學生的思維是非常靈活的，我們不能用常規的思維去約束他們，要允許他們有自由發揮的空間，允許有創造性，但是自由發揮的前提是要有完整的情節建構，而語言是服務于情節的，是內容的載體。
思維+情節+語言
例如：一考生第一段描述Roby走丟了以及尋狗的過程，第二段講述找到狗之后的道歉過程。看似跑題，但是有完整的情節建構且三分之二以上的句子沒有錯誤，可看出其語言能力，得分落在11-15得分檔。
01
閱卷要點
升華部分不太影響最后得分，升華只要符合自己上文設定的情節就可以。
升華
例如一考生的結尾升華部分As we sat chatting, Toby lay at our feet like a silent peacemaker, which shows the most broken bonds are fixed by the simplest acts of love. 這種首尾呼應的設計，遵循“問題原點即解決支點”的創作邏輯，又能通過寵物元素的二次激活，使情節轉折更具合理性與情感張力，最終達成文本內核的高度協同。
02
閱卷要點
試卷1
Para 1: Guilt welling up in my mind, I began to ask myself what I could do to make up for my fault. At first, I decided to text to him about it. However, my wife stopped me and suggested that I should meet my brother in person and espress my apology sincerely. Frowned, I hesitated for a while, thinking of the possible conflicts we could make. Then, we memorized the past days we spent together and what he had done for me in the past days, which reminded me the truly precious thing in my life. Biting my lips, I agreed with my wife, who delightedly made some biscuits for my brother.
Para 2: Pluckiny my courage, I rang the bell and wait outside, with butterflies in my stomach. It didn’t take too long for my brother to open the door, his eyes widening in shock. A sense of regret washing over me, I forced a smile and handed the biscuit to my brother. All of a sudden, Tony rushed out of the room, barking in excitment. “It seems that he likes the biscuit,” my brother laughed out.
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句式多樣：非謂語、獨立主格、從句、with復合結構等
銜接：at first、however、then、all of a sudden等
為了前后照應，首尾呼應，為了與原文保持高度一致，為了前后語言的協同，我們分析原文語言特征，可以結合自身體驗對原文素材進行創造性應用，呼應原文寫作場景，模仿前文句型，回扣前文信息，達到echo和語言協同的效果，這樣能提高續文語言的準確性和融洽度。原文中的一些好句式我們可以直接或改寫運用。
試卷2
Para 1: A wave of guilt washed over me. I shouldn’t have shut Toby outside, who was basically a family to my brother, especially after his wife’s death. If I had let him in, my brother and I would have enjoyed the family gathering joyfully. Having realized what I did was completely wrong, I told my wife that I was going to apologize. My wife, responding with an approving smile, suggested that I bring a gft as a friendly gesture. At the sight of the newly-baked biscuits on the table, it suddenly occured to me that the snack my wife baked were always my broter’s favorite.
Para 2: Toby barks greeting me, my heart racing quckily. Awaiting the reply for a while, the door was opened by brother, gazing at me freezy. Then come Toby, who seemed to be crazy to play with me but stoped by brother. I tried to approach them, the extremely sincere apologise delivered for my rudeness at the party while he stood still with disbelief. After for a while, a broad smile blossomed on his face meaning the forgive to me. This experience serves as a reminder that putting yourself in other’s shoes is significance.
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試卷3
Para 1: I ralized it was me who was at fault. A sense of guilt welled up in my heart, because of my overwhelmed command made him sad. To make up for my mistake, I should apologize to my brother and I asked my wife how to solve the awaward situation. She suggested that I should apologize to him and allow him to experience the pleasure of a gather’s interesting. Looking at the remaining cookies from that dinner party the other day, an idea popped into my mind.
Para 2: With the bisuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. I stood nervously at the door of his house and carefully knocking. For a moment, the door was slowly opened by my brother. The expression on his face was restless and asked me what I had come for. I took a deep breath and apologized in a smooth tone, “I shouldn’t made feel unhappy on that day because of my overwhelmed command, I hope you can forgive me.” Just then, Toby bounded into our view ang happily wagging its tail. After looking at Toby, my brother and I bursted out laughing happily.
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試卷4
Para 1: I realized it was me who was at fault. At a family reunion, I only thought about the safety of the children, but I forgot that Toby was like family to the elder brother. After he lost his wife, Toby was the only spiritual sustenance for the elder brother and it was very sad for my brother that I shut Toby out. I made up my mind to go to the door and apologize to my brother in person. I sincerely hope that my brother will forgive me for my mistake.
Para 2: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. I knocked with trembling hands and waited for the opening of the door. My heart is pounding when the elder brother opened the door and saw me, his eyes were full of surprise. I held the biscuits in my hand and handed it to my brother, “I’m very sorry that the party seperated you from Toby that day. Please forgive your stupid younger brother.” my brother paused a little and smiled and said, “I was also angry on the phone. Now my anger has disappeared, and I can understand your psychology of considering the safety of children.” Toby seemed to understand our conversation and came to the door wagging his tail.
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原文以“家庭聚會的矛盾”為切入點，用質樸的語言勾勒出人與物、人與人之間的各種沖突，其亮點在于通過細節鋪墊實現情感轉折，讓“規則沖突”自然轉向“情感聯結”，最終落腳“共情”的主題。所以，在續寫時若能緊扣上述關鍵點，將哥哥的情感需求(Toby的陪伴意義)與主人公的反思結合，便能自然推動情節走向溫暖的和解。
PART 04
備考建議
PART FOUR
備考建議
1. 建立主題語料庫：2025新高考I卷讀后續寫本身就是“家庭親情矛盾與和解”主題的優質素材庫（詞匯、短語、情感表達、情節模式等），我們可引導學生按主題分類整理，把一輪復習中每單元的單詞，短語，句型等基礎知識融入到續寫模板中，創設多種情境，使其靈活運用。
人與動物的沖突
人際沖突
內心沖突
留白與伏筆的沖突
以沖突為主線
，層層推進
Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire
he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter.
Toby的活力與家庭孩子安全的沖突
2. 以沖突為主線，層層推進：每次讀后續寫都進行層層遞進的沖突分析，培養沖突意識。
備考建議
備考建議
人與動物的沖突
人際沖突
內心沖突
留白與伏筆的沖突
以沖突為主線
，層層推進
不歡而散
持續發酵
Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog
導火索
I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house.
I texted him and expressed
wishes for him to come out again.
矛盾的本質是“規則”
與“情感”的碰撞
His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.”.
人與動物的沖突
人際沖突
內心沖突
留白與伏筆的沖突
以沖突為主線
，層層推進
My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first.
my conscience kept bothering me.
展現了人性的固執與愧疚
備考建議
備考建議
人與動物的沖突
人際沖突
內心沖突
留白與伏筆的沖突
以沖突為主線
，層層推進
he’ll get over it
Not a chance
此句既是伏筆也隱含留白
作為伏筆：“我” 的 “自負” 與弟弟的強硬拒絕（“Not a chance”）形成情節反差，暗示人物關系的潛在裂痕，為后文和解的必要性做鋪墊。
作為留白：“我” 寫下這句話時，未揭示弟弟的真實處境 (如喪妻、健康問題、對狗的情感依賴)，這種信息的 “留白”，營造了信息差，制造情節張力，增強后期共情。
備考建議
3.伏筆意識與閉環訓練：通過對比原文與續寫，強化學生識別伏筆、利用伏筆的能力。
伏筆類型 原文伏筆內容 分析 續寫呼應建議
物件伏筆 妻子為聚會準備的零食→續寫攜帶的餅干（后文） 餅干是妻子善意的延伸，象征修復關系的誠意 續寫Para2中讓餅干成為破冰媒介，有考生寫到餅干上印著哥哥童年最愛的圖案，有考生寫到餅干上印著Toby圖案，還有考生提到妻子烤了哥哥最喜歡的餅干，也有一少部分考生寫到
情感伏筆 “良心不斷困擾我” “試著站在哥哥角度思考” →認錯 預示主人公將主動認錯，情感轉折合理 續寫Para1可以具體化內心掙扎，擴充心生歉意的內容。
性格伏筆 哥哥近期狀態: 面臨健康問題 妻子數月前去世 Toby是唯一陪伴者 解釋哥哥敏感行為的深層原因，為“拒絕來訪”和長期冷戰提供合理性 續寫Para1結尾需體現對哥哥處境的共情：我怎能忽略他正承受著孤獨與病痛的雙重折磨。
備考建議
4.強化語篇意識,培養邏輯思維能力：教師可引導學生品首句形成問題鏈，以問題為導向，培養情節構思及銜接能力，讓學生明白情節的發展要符合邏輯，前后連貫，避免出現突兀或不合理的情節轉折。例如：有考生第一段寫到再次給弟弟打電話，弟弟的態度是“It’s not a big deal. We are ok and not blaming you now”,與上文Not a chance相比，態度轉變太快。
Para 1: I realized it was me who was at fault.
銜接句：What was my fault
What did l feel
過渡句：What did my wife do and why
Para 2: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
銜接句：How did my brother respond to my arrival
What did I say and do
結尾句：What conclusion did I raw from the story
備考建議
5.研究高考真題，回歸課本：教師要研究讀后續寫高考真題及其多版本的范文，對其句式進行主題分類，進行仿寫、英漢翻譯、語境寫作等練習。從高一開始，每星期開設寫作課，規劃好三年的寫作課程，針對每單元主題話題設置情境寫作。
No sooner did I stand in front of the door than Roby poked its head out of the windows.
（2020年高考I卷）No sooner had the scent of popcorn filled the air than the neighbors all poked their heads out of the windows.
I collected myself and came to the door, only to find Roby standing here, seeming to wait for me.
備考建議
6.改編和原創讀后續寫：改編完型填空和B篇閱讀理解成新的讀后續寫，或者精選外刊文章原創讀后續寫讓學生進行模擬練習。
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