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2024新課標全國一卷/二卷
讀后續寫(助人類）
起承轉合法寫文章
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【生活互助類】
故事模型：通過對近 5年高考真題以及大型模考中相關故事的分析發現，生活互助類故事主要聚集于一方陷入困境，如遭遇突發狀況、面臨難題等，另一方伸出援手，雙方通過互動與協作，最終解決問題的暖心故事。基于此，我們歸納出該類故事的情節發展示例，具體如下：
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【示例】2024新課標Ⅰ & Ⅱ卷
文章講述了“我”因航班延誤在維也納趕末班車去布拉格途中，得到出租車司機Gunter的幫助的故事。結尾處可從“我”的內心感受切入，通過回顧曾在困境中受助的經歷，感悟到善良的力量，進而闡述自身從受助者到施助者的成長轉變，如：At that moment, I realized the kindness once given to me has now become my own light to pass on—from a receiver to a giver, the circle of compassion grew whole.
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①I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
步驟一：串六大要素，理主旨大意
when:九月的一個晚上
who:“我”；出租車司機Gunter
why:“我”因航班延誤，需趕最后一班去布拉格的巴士
where:維也納機場；
布拉格的巴士站
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②That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
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③Finally with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue（隊列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said.
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④Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
⑤At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry."
what:打車趕上了最后一班去布拉格的巴士，但是無法支付司機車費
How: “我”告訴Gunter不好的消息；打電話給Gunter
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注意：續寫詞數應該為150個左右
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.________________________
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Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised._____
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主旨：在他人陷入困境時主動伸出援手，并遵守諾言
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【步驟二：畫“故事山”模型，析情節和感情線】
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考場上還是造不出情節（尤其是文章第二段）-只會情緒描寫、環境描寫湊字數？-文章不知道怎么升華
我教你起承轉合大法！（教你構建合理的劇情，把句子寫長......）
2.卡在某個分數死都上不去-到底什么是一篇好的續寫
（寫作像流水賬....上下文沒有銜接....情節和句子沒有亮點）
消防員去救關在保險里的孩子-第一段：準備切開保險箱 第二段：同事把密碼試出來
3.找不到好的范文和語料來學習寫作技巧-人間真實-老師對著范文教你們-
手把手教大家寫一篇讀后續寫2024.6月份高考真題
讀文章：教你獲取能幫你湊劇情的信息
建構情節：言之有物有信息量且合理的情節
寫句子：寫出讓老師為你點贊的句子
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2024年6月高考閱卷過程中發現學生的問題:
(1)情節設置太曲折,甚至是不切實際的。（半小時開車從布拉格到維也納）
(2)學生使用了過多情感描寫、環境描寫，而動作鏈的使用則較少。
(3)情感描寫使用不當或過度使用,夸張、泛濫或生搬硬套模板的情緒描寫，不符合人物的年齡、身份、性格、交際場合
(4) 堆砌或生搬硬套復雜句型和“高級"詞匯
(5) ...
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情境-和誰之間？在哪里？升華的落腳點
文章的核心任務和矛盾-閱卷的重點也是你文章構建情節的核心
布拉格-bus-Gunter
3.讀兩個銜接句-確定一定要寫的內容
起承轉合寫文章
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I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
起：自然反應 or補充說明完 我-
I had braced （撐穩）myself for his anger. After all, who wouldn’t be frustrated after all that trouble, only to find out they couldn’t get paid
承：But to my utter（完全的） amazement,Gunter just shrugged （聳肩）and gave me a kind smile. “Well, these things happen,” he said calmly, his eyes filled with understanding/He reached into the glove compartment（手套箱）, took out a pen and a small notebook, and handed them to me. “Write down your number, okay You can pay me back when you’re back in Vienna.”
范文引例，逐步攻克
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轉：心態轉變-總結一下Here was a complete stranger, someone I had met in a rush, and yet he trusted me+感覺
合1：I quickly scribbled（潦草的書寫） my number, promising to repay him.Just as I turned to leave, he stopped me. For a moment,I froze, fearing he’d reconsidered. Instead, he handed me cash with a warm smile. “For your ticket,” he said. “Return it when you can.”
Seated on the bus, I watched his taxi disappear, his hand still raised in farewell（告別）.

合2：I quickly scribbled my number, promising to repay him.Just as I turned to leave, he stopped me. For a moment,I froze, fearing he’d reconsidered. Instead, he handed me cash with a warm smile. “For your ticket,” he said. “Return it when you can.”
People often say that big cities are cold and indifferent, but that one encounter had shown me just how wrong that assumption could be.
人們常說大城市冷漠無情，但那次偶遇讓我明白這種看法是多么錯誤。
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合3：I quickly scribbled my number, promising to repay him.Just as I turned to leave, he stopped me. For a moment,I froze, fearing he’d reconsidered. Instead, he handed me cash with a warm smile. “For your ticket,” he said. “Return it when you can.”
A wave of emotion washed over me—gratitude mixed with a profound sense of warmth.
一股情感的波瀾涌上心頭——感激之情與深深的溫暖交織在一起。
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Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
起：I wanted to repay Gunter, not just with money, but with my sincere gratitude.
起：When we met, Gunter greeted me with that same warm smile.
承：I handed him the cash, even adding a bit extra to show my appreciation, but Gunter immediately refused.
轉：He shook his head with a grin（咧著嘴笑）. “No, no, just what’s owed. Helping people should be enough reward, don’t you think ”
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合：It was the warmth of a genuine human connection, a reminder that even in a world that sometimes feels harsh and indifferent, there are still people who will go out of their way to help, simply because they can. When it was time to leave, Gunter patted me on the shoulder. “I hope you enjoy the rest of your time in Vienna. And remember, if you ever need anything, don’t hesitate to call me.” I nodded, my heart full. As I watched him drive away, I realized that this experience had changed something within me.
這是一種真摯的人際關系所帶來的溫暖，它提醒我們，即便在一個有時顯得冷漠無情的世界里，仍有一些人會竭盡全力去幫助他人，僅僅是因為他們能夠這樣做而已。
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升華：As I embark（開始；著手） on the next chapter of my life, I carry with me the lessons learned from Gunter and speak to those in trouble, “Can I help you ”Standing there on the bustling streets of Vienna, I felt a warmth that had nothing to do with the weather.Next time, I’ll say “Can I help you ” to someone in need, just as Gunter did for me.
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