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讀后續寫
What’s the genre of the passage
narrative
what the clue of the passage
the rocking horse
2. Where
3. When
1. Who
4. What happened
a small shop in the busy streets of Los Angeles
Not mentioned
“I” happened to encounter the rocking horse, recalling the past related to the rocking horse, and decided to buy the rocking horse in the store.
I, my two kids, my grandfather,my grandmother, my mom, the shopkeeper
2. Read for important information.
(1) I noticed a white wooden rocking horse near the door. It looked just like the one my grandfather had bought for me when 1 was young.
(2)Then, I led them back to where the white rocking horse was.
(3)Looking at the rocking horse brought back a flood of memories.
(4)One day, he brought home a beautiful white rocking horse and called it my "dream horse."
(5) "Remember when you accidentally scratched its neck " my mom once told me. "Your grandfather just laughed and said it gave the horse character." (6)
(6) But when I was in high school, my grandfather passed away. Soon after, we moved. With so much to pack and not enough space, we had to sell some big things, like my favorite rocking horse. Letting it go felt like losing a part of my childhood.
Paragraph 1
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop.
Paragraph 2
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse.
一、文本核心內容
1. 主題脈絡：通過"搖馬"這一意象串聯起三代人的情感紐帶（祖父→自己→子女），體現記憶傳承與親情延續。
2. 情感脈絡：懷舊（發現搖馬）→回憶（與祖父的溫情時光）→失落（祖父離世/賣掉搖馬）→悵惘（現實觸發的回憶）→轉折（續寫部分的情感復蘇）
Paragraph 1: Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop.
銜接：
過渡：
銜接：
Found the scratch in the horse’s neck.
The reaction of the author.
Recall the happy moments with grandfather.
The communication with the shopkeeper and ask for the price.
Paragraph 2: With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse.
銜接：
過渡：
主題：
The feelings of purchasing the white wooden rocking horse.
The children’s reactions after buying the wooden horse.
The continuation of family affection.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
三、寫 作——讀后續寫——試題解讀（范文一）
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. Feeling as if I was reclaiming a piece of my childhood, I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. This familiar object connected me to moments of happiness and warmth with my grandfather, and I wanted my children to experience even a fraction of that love through it. Watching my children marvel (驚奇) at the simple yet sturdy (堅固的) toy, I couldn’t help but feel a sense of joy in sharing this part of my past with them, hoping it would create new memories for our family.
三、寫 作——讀后續寫——試題解讀（范文二）
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. I asked the shop owner if there was any history behind it, half-hoping to find out that it actually was my original toy. Though there was no such luck, the shopkeeper’s warmth and understanding were comforting. As we left the shop, I glanced back at the colorful, inviting entrance, feeling a sense of closure. The rocking horse, now secure in our hands, wasn’t just a connection to my past but a bridge to the future my kids and I would build together, full of cherished moments and love..
三、寫 作——讀后續寫——評分細則
【內容（情節+情感）+ 語言 + 連貫】
1. 本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。
2. 評分時，先根據所續寫短文的內容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調整檔次，最后給分。
3. 詞數少于130的，從總分中減去2分。
4. 評分時，應主要從以下四個方面考慮:
(1) 與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度;
(2) 內容的豐富性;
(3) 應用語法結構和詞匯的豐富性和準確性;
(4) 上下文的連貫性。
5. 如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分數降低一個檔次。
6. 拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。
特例：
1. 只寫一段，最高13分
2. 字數不夠，降一檔
3. 字數嚴重不足，最高三檔中線（13分）
三、寫 作——讀后續寫——內容界定
第一段續寫（關于在商店的反應和行動）
1. 能細膩地描述看到rocking-horse后的情感反應，如回憶起與祖父的美好時光；
2. 合理描述與店主的交流，包括詢問價格等情節；
3. 對rocking-horse的細節描寫，如觸摸rocking-horse的感受 ……
第二段續寫（購買搖馬及后續情感）
1. 清晰描述購買rocking-horse的過程及心情；
2. 表達對rocking-horse能給孩子帶來新回憶的期待；
3. 強調rocking-horse對自己和家庭的特殊意義 ……
注意：不作為扣分點：1. 沒有顯性主題升華
2. 表達邏輯合理，但不包含在上面列舉之內
3. 續寫出現前文個別句子，但使用合理（如加again…）

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