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高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫微技能訓(xùn)練3
【訓(xùn)練】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
(2023年1月浙江卷)I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention. So I entered it. It was a hummingbird(蜂鳥), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spiderwebs(蛛網(wǎng)) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away: she sat, looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering(懸停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good bye.”
注意： 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150 左右; 2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
1. 梳理原文
讀五要素 （1） Who 主要人物：I, a hummingbird 次要人物：my friend
（2） When When I visited my old friend
（3） Where On my friend’s farm
（4） How I (curious→concerned→surprised→worried→_____)
（5） What (main idea) “我”受邀去朋友的農(nóng)場(chǎng)燒烤，在廢棄房子的破舊窗戶上救助了一只被蜘蛛網(wǎng)困住的蜂鳥。在“我”準(zhǔn)備離開(kāi)的時(shí)候，蜂鳥飛來(lái)與“我”告別。當(dāng)“我”再次來(lái)到農(nóng)場(chǎng)后，很期待能再遇見(jiàn)蜂鳥
續(xù)寫策略與線索 （6） Writing Clues 第一段：“我”再次來(lái)到農(nóng)場(chǎng)→“我”很擔(dān)心蜂鳥，非常想要再次見(jiàn)到她→“我”在農(nóng)場(chǎng)里尋找蜂鳥→可是沒(méi)有找到
第二段：“我”決定離開(kāi)，就在這時(shí)蜂鳥出現(xiàn)了→“我”很開(kāi)心很欣慰→蜂鳥歡快地飛著叫著，似乎是在表示感謝→“我”覺(jué)得很不可思議→“我”感到很滿足，覺(jué)得做了正確的事
2. 續(xù)寫故事
第一段微技能訓(xùn)練：
首句已給出： A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
第一句Transitional sentence銜接句承上（銜接首句的內(nèi)容）：
一到農(nóng)場(chǎng)我就直奔牛奶屋，渴望再次見(jiàn)到蜂鳥。
Arriving at the farm, I ______________the milking house directly, ___________ see
the hummingbird again.
第二句心理描寫：我似乎與這只蜂鳥建立了一種親密的關(guān)系。
It seemed as if I _________________________________________ .
第三句動(dòng)作一：當(dāng)我到達(dá)牛奶屋的時(shí)候，我發(fā)現(xiàn)壞了的窗戶已經(jīng)被修好了。
the milking house, I found that _________________ .
第四句動(dòng)作二：我繞著牛奶屋轉(zhuǎn)了幾圈，搜尋著蜂鳥的蹤跡。
I the house several times, the bird.
Writing Tips:段首句涉及到的人物有I，事物是the farm，根據(jù)句意，銜接句從I的角度展開(kāi)更為合適。
dashed towards eager to
had formed a close bond with the bird
walked around searching for
When I got to the broken window had been fixed
2. 續(xù)寫故事
第五句 環(huán)境描寫：然而，沒(méi)有任何蜂鳥的蹤跡。
However, .
第六句獨(dú)白：我不禁在想，那個(gè)小東西有沒(méi)有成功地回到家還是又被困在了某個(gè)地方了呢。
I _____________________ if the tiny creature managed to go back home or _______________ .
第七句銜接句啟下（結(jié)合第二段首句，結(jié)束第一段）：
我感到很失望，決定離開(kāi)牛奶屋了。
that I decided to leave the house.
there was no sign of her
couldn’t help wondering
was trapped somewhere
So disappointed was I
Writing Tips: 根據(jù)第二段段首句反向推理，I沒(méi)有見(jiàn)到蜂鳥很失望所以決定離開(kāi)牛奶屋了。
2. 續(xù)寫故事
第二段微技能訓(xùn)練：
首句已給出： I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
第一句Transitional sentence銜接句承上（銜接首句的內(nèi)容）：
（1）從“I”的角度：“是你！”我大喊道。“It’s you!” I .
（2）從the hummingbird 的角度：她徑直朝我飛來(lái)。She me directly.
第二句動(dòng)作一：她在空中盤旋著，慢慢地接近我，像之前一樣，看著我的眼睛。
Hovering, she me slowly and my eyes as before.
第三句動(dòng)作二：我伸出一只手，她停在了上面，并且發(fā)出叫聲。
I one hand and she sat on it, a squeaking call.
Writing Tips:段首句涉及到的人物有I，事物是the hummingbird，根據(jù)句意, 銜接句可以從I或者the hummingbird兩個(gè)角度展開(kāi)。
cried
flew towards
approached looked into
stretched letting out
2. 續(xù)寫故事
第四句對(duì)話：
“很高興再次見(jiàn)到你。”我回應(yīng)著她的叫聲，溫柔地?fù)崦挠鹈?br/>“Glad to see you again,” I , .
第五句動(dòng)作三：之后她飛起來(lái)了，搖晃著腦袋，像是在表達(dá)感謝。
Then she , turning her head from side to side as if _____________
___________________________.
第六句（心理描寫）：看到她安然無(wú)恙，真是讓人如釋重負(fù)。
____________________________________________________________________.
第七句回歸主題，感情升華：有時(shí)候，一次小小的善舉便能將我們的世界變得更加和諧。
Sometimes a little kindness can ______________________________________.
responded smoothing her feather gently
flew up to express
her gratitude
It was really a relief to find her safe and sound
make our world more harmonious
閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
My writing career began quite accidentally. It was all because of my friend Henry.
Born into a poor family, Henry had no chance to attend school. He couldn’t read but he liked my reading for him greatly. One day I played a little trick on Henry. I was reading him a story from my textbook. Suddenly I moved away from the story and made up my own, pretending to turn pages regularly. Henry, of course, had no idea at all. Upon finishing the story, Henry began to clap.
“That was the best story you’ve read me in a long time,” he said, still clapping.
I laughed. “Really ”
“It was great. Will you read me more of it tomorrow ”
“Fascinating,” I thought, feeling like a man who discovered a buried treasure in his own backyard. That same night, I tried writing my first short story. It was a story about a man who found a magic cup. If he cried into the cup, his tears turned into pearls, but he was a happy man and rarely cried. So he managed to find ways to make himself sad. The story ended with the man sitting on a mountain of pearls, unable to feel happy any longer.
The next day, I ran to Henry after school, asking him to hear the story and told him I wrote it last night. Henry was totally absorbed in it, his face shifting as the story developed.
“Some day, you will be a great writer,” Henry said. “And your stories will be read all over the world. But can I ask a question Why didn’t the man just eat some onions to make himself cry to get pearls ” I was shocked because I never expected Henry could be helpful to my writing. I rewrote it and with Henry’s encouragement, I sent it to a magazine. To my surprise, it was published and sold well.
注意： 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150 左右; 2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Whenever I finished a new story, I would turn to Henry.
I decided to use the money to help Henry.
1. 梳理原文
讀五要素 （1） Who
（2） When
（3） Where
（4） How
at home
I, Henry
One day, That same night , The next day
Henry(friendly and curious→sincere→helpful→________); I(mischievous→inspired→moved→surprised→______)
1. 梳理原文
讀五要素 （5） What (main idea)
續(xù)寫策略與線索 （6） Writing Clues
“我”給好朋友Henry講故事時(shí)，故意改編了情節(jié)，但是Henry卻認(rèn)為這是非常棒的故事，這促使“我”開(kāi)始自己寫故事。每當(dāng)“我”與Henry分享故事時(shí)，他總能以提問(wèn)題的方式給“我”提出好建議。“我”把修改好的故事向雜志社投稿，出乎意料的是，“我”的故事很受歡迎
第一段：每次我寫完故事都會(huì)與Henry分享→Henry給我創(chuàng)作的靈感→我對(duì)Henry心懷感激→更多的故事出版并獲得豐富稿酬；第二段：我想要用得到的報(bào)酬幫助Henry→決定資助Henry接受教育→Henry的反應(yīng)→雙方對(duì)“友誼”的理解
2. 續(xù)寫故事
Whenever I finished a new story, I would turn to Henry. Gradually, I found Henry was really an excellent listener as well as a good adviser. Although he couldn’t read, he had a clear mind and a talent for polishing stories by asking questions. His questions were really a rich source of inspiration for a beginner like me. Every time I shared my new stories to him, he always listened attentively and offered valuable suggestions. Sometimes I asked him, “How could you do that ” He only replied with a smile and helped as ever. I was grateful for his help and the very inspiration from him. Later, several more stories were published and I was well paid.
I decided to use the money to help Henry. However, I didn’t know what Henry wanted most. But when he touched the pages dearly on which my stories were printed, I realized that Henry should also have the privilege to enjoy the beauty of words. Therefore, I chose to sponsor his education. My decision really surprised and moved Henry who had a strong passion for knowledge. He gave me a big hug and whispered “Thanks” to me, with excitement shining in his eyes. He even joked to me “You must be an angel.” We two also realized the truth of that old saying: wealth is not friends, but friends are wealth.

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