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十句五定法練習之容貌焦慮篇
Eggs, bacon, bagels and croissants（羊角面包）, her favourite meal of the day sat right in front of her telling her to have more, probably just this one day. Her hand reached out for the last croissant; “STOP” said her mind, “PLEASE” begged the nineteen-year-old heart. Annie could feel the tires around her waist, weighing her down, emotionally and physically. She pulled her hand back, eyeing the inviting croissant, which would have been hers if only she had not decided to follow her dream, a dream which seemed beyond her reach.
But there she was, she wanted it, and wanted it badly, a fantasy of a teenager to fit into the beautiful peacock green bikini（比基尼）. A trip had been planned, to the sunny beaches, by a group of friends, and the trip included her. She used to sit depressed listening to her slim friends discuss about the kind of clothes they purchased, and how short each of their skirts were, and how beautiful they looked. She wanted to see their expression change from surprise to admiration, so she decided to go on diet and take fitness courses.
Weeks passed and her patience started to die away. The fat was stubborn and refused to melt fast, but the time went fast. No matter how less she ate, she still looked awfully plump (豐滿的), which annoyed her and she was ready to call it quits. She sat on her bed and wept an entire evening ignoring her dinner. Her tears dried up, and she lay down on her bed staring at the ceiling, letting random thoughts pass through her mind, then she heard two women talking outside her window. She heard one woman saying: “My child is special, and every child is god’s gift. It doesn’t matter what’s on the outside, inner self is what matters.”
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150個左右；2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Curious, Annie got up and looked out of her window. ______________
Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her own figure in the mirror .___________________________
Step1.讀原文，理情節
when
where
who
what
why
friends, two women
Annie
Just one day
She wanted to amaze her friends by wearing a bikini during the trip.
At her home
She tried to lose weight, but failed
beginning
climax/conflict
ending
rising action
falling action/solution
Read for action and emotion
be fat and attracted by food
dream to wear bikini to amze friends
fail to lose weight
depressed
P1
desiring
hopeless
P2
P3
change of mind
accept herself/inner beauty


step2
十句五定構思情節
十句五定法 展開劇情
十句五定法
讀后續寫要求續寫詞數為150詞左右。若一句話平均15詞，則10句話就夠了。
“十句五定”通常指10句話中5句的位置及內容已定。
para1 para2
第1句：接著para1給出首句（心理/動作鏈） 第6句：接著para2給出首句（心理/動作鏈）
第2句：語言描寫（人物對話或心理話） 第7句：語言描寫
第3句：動作描寫 第8句：動作描寫
第4句：情緒描寫 第9句：故事結局
第5句：根據para2首句來寫 第10句：主題升華
十句五定法 展開劇情
(para1) Curious, Annie got up and looked out of her window.
第1句話：Annie看到了什么？（那人何出此言？）
第5句話：Annie意識到自己在意外表很膚淺。
(para2)Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her own figure in the mirror.
第2-4句：動作，語言（人物對話）心理描寫
十句五定法 展開劇情
(para2)Annie turned her eyes away from the scene and saw her own figure in the mirror.。
第6句話：Annie意識到自己雖然胖，但是卻擁有健康
第9句話：Annie從此不再身材焦慮（故事的結局）
第10句話：內在美才是真正重要的東西（情感的升華）
第7-8句：繼續動作/語言/心理活動描寫
"Beauty is not in the face; beauty is a light in the heart."
— Kahlil Gibran
"美不在容顏，而在心中閃耀的光芒。" —— 紀伯倫
"Beauty begins the moment you decide to be yourself."
— Coco Chanel
"當你決定做自己的那一刻，美便開始了。"
—— 可可·香奈兒
step3
寫出具體10句話
Para 1
S1: 兩名女人站在下面的花園里，一個是她的鄰居Mrs.Thompson, 牽著一個明顯殘疾的女孩，另一個人是是個陌生人。
S2：小女孩似乎很開心，笑聲在空中回蕩。
S3: Mrs.Thompson溫暖地笑著說道：“她也許看起來不像其他孩子，但是她有一顆金子般的心。”
S4：Mrs.Thompson的話回響在Annie耳中，一種恥辱感涌上她的心頭。
S5：她太聚焦于改變自己的身體而忘記了感激自己擁有的東西。
Para 2
S1：數月以來她第一次沒有自我批評。
S2：她突然想到她不需要穿進那條孔雀綠的比基尼才會變得漂亮。
S3：美麗不是關于減肥，而是關于擁抱真正的自己。
S4: 從那天起，Annie一周鍛練幾次，但只是為了保持健康，而不是獲得關注。
S5：正如可可·香奈兒說的，"當你決定做自己的那一刻，美便開始了。"
Filled with curiosity, Annie got up and looked out the window. She saw her neighbor Mrs. Thompson standing in the garden below with a visibly disabled little girl and a stranger. The child seemed utterly happy, her laughter ringing through the air. "She may not look like other children," Mrs. Thompson said warmly, "but she has a heart of gold." Her words echoed in Annie's ears, bringing with them a wave of shame - she'd been so focused on changing her body that she'd forgotten to appreciate what she already had.
For the first time in months, Annie looked at herself without criticism. It suddenly struck her that she didn’t need to fit into that peacock-green bikini to be beautiful. True beauty wasn’t about losing weight, but about embracing who she truly was. From that day on, Annie exercised a few times a week—not for attention, but simply to stay healthy. As Coco Chanel once said, "Beauty begins the moment you decide to be yourself."
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