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Dear teachers and classmates:
I hoped you are doing well! I am writing this letter to talked about weight management. It was a very important topic, and I think we should pay attention to it.
Some people were too fat, and some are too thin. I think weight management is good. If you are fat, you should eat less. If you are thin, you can eat more. Runing is good. Swiming is also good.
In conclusion, I hope my advice can help you. If you have any questions, please let me know. I look forward to your reply.
1.時態混用
2.體裁錯誤
6.書寫潦草
5.拼寫錯誤和缺乏過渡詞
3.要點空洞
4.要點錯誤
Dear teachers and classmates,
It’s my great honor to talk about the importance of scientific weight management. Weight management is not just about looking good, but also about long-term health. Proper weight management lowers the risk of diseases and improves our quality of life.
Here are some suggestions. First, adopting a balanced diet is crucial, which means eating more vegetables and fruits while cutting down on junk food. Besides, regular exercise matters as well, such as jogging, cycling, or dancing each week. In addition, it’s vital to ensure adequate sleep, as it facilitates regulating our weight and boosts our daily energy.
Remember, managing weight is a long-term commitment, requiring our continuous effort and patience. Let’s start today and build healthier habits for a better future! Thank you！
總結-評分標準
體裁錯誤：寫成書信而非演講稿
時態混亂和拼寫錯誤
要點錯誤：錯誤的健康觀念
要點空泛：沒有解釋為什么好、具體好在哪里
缺乏語句間的連接成分，內容不連貫和書寫較差
應用文評分標準
文本格式正確
較少語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤
覆蓋所有內容要點,表達清楚、合理;
覆蓋所有內容要點,表達清楚、合理;
內容連貫，書寫工整
A
B
C
D
E
3 Tips
Tips
A
B
C
正確審題:抓題目體裁，定格式
充實內容: 橫向——要點多維度
縱向——細節要具體
過渡詞與書寫：積累與練習
加入標題
Tip 1：審題
體裁
時態
人稱
要點
文體
時間
對象
話題+事件
演講稿
一般現在時
第一人稱
1.演講背景
2.體重管理的意義
3.你的建議
Tip 1：審題
書信
約稿信，邀請信，咨詢信，求助信，申請信，道歉信，建議信，祝賀信，告知信，感謝信，推薦信，
非書信
通知，報道，發言稿 ，歡迎詞，介紹，評論，投稿
I am writing to
Match the text type
Good morning, everyone! I feel greatly honored to stand here and extend a warm welcome to you on behalf of the whole students.
...
That’s it! Thanks for listening.
NOTICE
In order to enrich students’ life, an outstanding English short movie will be shown in the library from 3:00-4:00 in the afternoon on June 9th, organized by the student union. Here are relevant details about it....
Students’ Union
A Cross-Country Running Race
Last Sunday, our school held a 5km cross country running race, which attracted many enthusiastic participants, including students and teachers.
Dear Jack,
Delighted hearing that you are planning a club activity themed “Green Beijing”, I am writing to share my suggestions for the event with you.
建議信
書面通知
演講
報道
Tip2:擴充內容：橫向與縱向
Tip2: 橫向——要點多維度
Tip2: 縱向——細節要具體
Tip2:擴充內容:橫向——要點多維度
"橫向——要點多維度"指的是針對同一個核心要點，從不同角度進行拓展論述，使內容更全面、立體。
身體健康
心理健康
生活質量
社會形象
意義
1.體重管理的意義
Healthy body
mental health
quality of life
social image
athletic ability…
Tip2:擴充內容:橫向——要點多維度
飲食建議
運動建議
生活習慣
監測方面
建議
2.你的建議
Exercise
Diet
Living habits
Weekly measurements….
Tip2:擴充內容:橫向——要點多維度
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. It also improves our confidence and social image.
Here are some suggestions. We should have a balanced diet. We need to exercise regularly. Lastly, we should try to reduce stress.
多維度要點必須搭配具體細節才能有效支撐論點，否則就像只有骨架沒有骨肉。
Tip2:擴充內容:縱向——細節要具體
身體健康
心理健康
生活質量
社會形象
意義
1.體重管理的意義
“縱向——細節要具體”就是要深入剖析一個要點，提供具體的例子、數據、步驟或結果，使內容更加有說服力和可操作性。
橫向多維度是設計不同房間（廚房/臥室/客廳）
縱向具體化是把每個房間裝修到位（廚房要有幾個灶臺/臥室床的尺寸）
Maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%。
It also improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
數據
舉例
Healthy body
mental health
quality of life
social image
athletic ability…
Avoid disease
impression
Tip2:擴充內容:縱向——細節要具體
2.你的建議
飲食建議
運動建議
生活習慣
監測方面
建議
we should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals.
Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
For lifestyle, ensuring 7-8 hours of sleep every night and managing stress are key.
For monitoring, checking your weight weekly and adjusting your habits as needed can help you stay on track.
Exercise
Diet
Living habits
Weekly measurements….
數據+舉例
舉例
舉例
舉例
fruit
walking
Enough sleep
Check weekly
Tip2:擴充內容:縱向——細節要具體
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. Maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%. It also improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
Here are some suggestions. We should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals. Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
缺乏過渡詞從而使句子之間的邏輯不清晰，使內容不連貫。否則就像只有骨架和骨肉，沒有血液。
Tip3:積累過渡詞和練習書寫
一. 表示遞進關系的過渡詞
additionally 加之；又
besides 此外；除……之外
equally important 同樣重要的是
furthermore 此外；而且
in addition 另外
in other words 換句話說
last but not least 最后但同樣重要的是
二. 表示轉折關系的過渡詞
although 雖然；盡管
at the same time 同時；
despite 不管；盡管；不論
even if 即使
even though 即使
however 然而；可是
in spite of 不管
instead 代替；而不
三. 表示選擇關系的過渡詞
either…or… ……或……
instead of… ……，而不是……
neither…nor… ……和……都不…
四. 表示比較關系的過渡詞
compared with / to 與……比較
equally 相等地；平等地　　　
in contrast to 和……對比
in the same way 同樣地
instead 代替；相反
on the contrary 正相反
五. 表示因果關系的過渡詞
accordingly 因此；從而
as a result of 作為結果
because (of) 因為
consequently 從而；因此
due to 由于；應歸于
hence 因此；從此
in that 由于；因為；既然
六. 用于表示總結的過渡詞
above all 最重要的是
at last 最后
briefly 簡單扼要地
consequently 因此
eventually 最后
in a word 總之
in brief 簡言之
in conclusion 總之；最后
in short 簡而言之
in summary 簡要地說
in sum 總之；簡而言之
obviously 顯然
Tip2:擴充內容:縱向——細節要具體
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. In particular, maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%. Moreover, it improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
Here are some suggestions. First, we should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals. Additionally, Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
正確審題
Tip1:定體裁，時態，人稱，要點
充實內容
Tip2: 橫向——要點多維度
縱向——細節要具體
Tip3:過渡詞與書寫
過渡/書寫
SUMMARY
正確審題
2. 人稱： 3.時態 4.要點：
。
充實內容
3. 橫向：要點多維度 4. 縱向：細節要具體
problem+consequence
①
②
...
suggestion+reason
①
②
...
（2023全國I）假定你是李華，外教Ryan準備將學生隨機分為兩人一組，讓大家課后練習口語，你認為這樣分組存在問題。請你給外教寫一封郵件，內容包括:
1. 說明問題；2. 提出建議。
1. The text type is
GROUP WORK
第一人稱
一般現在時
difference in preferred topics
It may ignore that students may be interested in different topics.
It may result in students with vastly different speaking abilities being paired together.
learning gap
說明問題
difference in learning style
Some students may prefer a quieter environment while some may prefer a more interactive style.
decrease in confidence
It may let the less competent ones feel overwhelmed and less confident.
The problems could be:
02
01
03
04
The suggestions are:
interest-based pairing
This could lead to dynamic and engaging conversations that help both parties improve.
peer mentorship同伴指導
The mentor student can enhance their knowledge and the other side can receive support and guidance.
ability-based pairing
They can challenge and motivate each other without feeling unconfident.
Weekly changing-partner system
This would allow everyone to learn from a variety of peers and adapt to different conversational styles.

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