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新高考英語
讀后續(xù)寫提分技能及其點題例析
人物情感描寫高分技巧
目錄
Can you write down the expressions of emotions for the mind-map
happy
sad
afraid
nervous
angry
surprised
thankful
moved
tired
satisfied
How do you feel
Mind-map：Emotions
▲情感形容詞的后綴常有：
-ed(人，感到...的),
-ing(物，令人..的),
-ful/-less(人/物,...的)
1.happy: happy,delighted,cheerful,excited/exciting, thrilled, shout with joy
2.sad: sad, heart-broken,upset, disappointed, depressed/frustrated,
sorrowful, desperate, tears streaming
down one’s cheek(淚流滿面)…
3.afraid: afraid, scared, frightened, fearful, palms are sweating(手心出汗)…
Mind-map：Emotions
4.nervous:
nervous, anxious,worried, stressed,stressful(令人有壓力的)
5.angry:
angry,mad,bad-temered,lose one's temper(發(fā)火),
burn with anger(怒火中燒)
6.surprised:
surprised/surprising, amazed/amazing,astonished/shocked(震驚的)
7.thankful: thankful,grateful, thank sb for
8.moved: moved/moving, touched/touching
9.tired: tired, exhausted
10.satisfied: satisfied, pleased,content
11.relaxed: relaxed, take it easy, relieved
12.hopeful：hopeful,with hope in one's eyes,hopeless(無希望的)
13.determined: determined,firm, have a will/ have a strong mind(意志堅定)
14.quiet：quiet, silent,calm
15.brave:brave,fearless,couragoushopeful型：hopeful,with hope in one's eyes,hopeless(無希望的)
情感描寫技巧
1.be/feel/become +adj. (系表結(jié)構(gòu))
2.Feeling+adj，主+謂+賓 (非謂語短語，作原因/伴隨狀語)
3.adj+adj, 主+謂+賓（形容詞短語，作原因/伴隨狀語）
4.形容詞+ly→副詞（修飾動詞/形容詞/副詞/介詞短語/句子）5.with+n.（介詞短語，作原因/伴隨狀語）
技巧1. be/feel/become +adj. (系表結(jié)構(gòu))
2. 聽到那個壞消息，她很傷心。
He _________________ and sweet.
was very happy
1. 他又高興又甜蜜。
Hearing the bad news, she ________________.
felt very sad
3. 天黑了，她非常擔(dān)心她兒子的安全,情不自禁哭了。
she ______________________about her son's safety
when it was dark, and couldn't help crying.
felt very worried
技巧 2. Feeling+adj，主+謂+賓 (非謂語短語,作原因/伴隨狀語)
1. 他感到很激動，立刻拿出手機，迫不及待地告訴他的朋友這次經(jīng)歷。
she went on her way,_______________, and soon met an old man on the road.
feeling upset
2. 她不開心地繼續(xù)趕路，不久就在路上遇到一位老人。
_________________, he took out his phone atonce, eager to tell his friends the experience.
Feeling excited
Wang Peng sat in his empty restaurant, _____________________.
feeling very frustrated/depressed
3. 王鵬坐在空蕩蕩的飯店里面，感到非常沮喪。
技巧 3. adj, 主+謂+賓（形容詞短語，作原因/伴隨狀語）
3. 難過但不恐懼，他決定要改變這一切。
We finally arrived at our destination，______________．
tired and hungry
2. 我們終于到達(dá)了目的地，又累又餓.
Heartbroken but fearless
_________________, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.
1. 嚇壞了，埃利和我嘗試了所有我們知道的防御熊的行動。
Frighted/Terrified
_______________________________,he decided to turn everything around.
技巧 4. 形容詞+ly→副詞（修飾動詞/形容詞/副詞/介詞短語/句子）
1.他高興地笑了，露出了一排潔白整齊的牙齒。
______________, I had taught Anthony to sew when he was 13, when he still respected me.
Luckily/Fortunately
2.幸運地,在安東尼13歲時我已經(jīng)教過他縫紉, 那時他還在崇拜我.
He _____________, revealing a row of white and even teeth.
smiled happily
技巧 5. with/in+n.（介詞短語）
2. “但是我知道他剛才就在那兒。”露茜說，眼里帶著淚水。
She looked at me ________________.
1.她驚奇地看著我。
" But I know he was, " said Lucy, ___________ in her eyes .
with tears
in amazement
如 in surprise/amazement,with joy/tears/ worry(憂慮)
典題分析
文本分析
part1
1. Have you ever heard anything interesting about the bank robber
2. What will you do if you meet a bank robber
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
01
“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
02
03
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (搶劫)!
04
05
06
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
07
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
08
09
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
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著急
介詞 in +名詞
in danger
in need
in trouble
in a big hurry
單詞大師 Word Master
just as
單詞大師 Word Master
正當(dāng)，好像
單詞大師 Word Master
正當(dāng)我開始覺得自己永遠(yuǎn)都好不
了了的時候，我的病開始好轉(zhuǎn)了。
Just as I started to think that
I was never going to get well,
the illness began to recede.
充滿
be filled with
單詞大師 Word Master
The boy’s eyes filled
with tears.
單詞大師 Word Master
篇章大師 Passage Person
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
記敘文
文體
一般過去時
時態(tài)
第三人稱
人稱
篇章大師 Passage Person
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
語言描寫 ： “What happened ”
篇章大師 Passage Person
環(huán)境描寫：was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
篇章大師 Passage Person
隱含線索：cars stopped, joined the crow in front of the bank, a different answer
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
篇章大師 Passage Person
事件：Arthur 的危機是被誤會為 bank thief
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
一個有趣的并且難忘的經(jīng)歷
人與社會
閱讀小組長（Discussion Leader)
人物分析
情節(jié)發(fā)展
主題語境
主 旨
Reread the story and figure out the plot.
On his way to work, Arthur helped the young man who had got a problem.
Arthur agreed to help the young man carry the suitcase.
Arthur heard the alarm, looked around at the crowd of people and started to run.
frightened
續(xù)寫部分
續(xù)寫部分
本文情節(jié)線
setting
環(huán)境
rising action
發(fā)展
falling action
結(jié)局
climax
高潮
人物
時間
地點
Arthur 在去上班的路上幫助一個年輕人拿箱子
銀行發(fā)生搶劫，警鈴大響
Arthur 拿著箱子看著周圍人群開始奔跑
kind
nervous
terrified
本文情節(jié)線
setting
環(huán)境
rising action
發(fā)展
falling action
結(jié)局
climax
高潮
人物
時間
地點
Arthur 在去上班的路上幫助一個年輕人拿箱子
銀行發(fā)生搶劫，警鈴大響
Arthur 拿著箱子看著周圍人群開始奔跑
kind
nervous
terrified
resolution
解決
ending
尾聲
續(xù)寫部分
續(xù)寫部分
篇章概括者 Summarizer
Arthur 在上班的路上遇到了一個需要幫助的年輕人。在他幫助這個年輕人拿箱子的時候，突然旁邊的銀行發(fā)出警報聲，Arthur看著聚集的人群，拿著箱子就跑。然后？
On the way to work, Arthur met a young man who needed a hand. While Arthur was carrying the suitcase for the young man, suddenly, the long loud noise of an alarm broke out from the bank. Seeing the crowd gathering, Arthur was so frightened that he ran away without another thought. Then...
Arthur Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
warm-hearted
Arthur “Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. “No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.” positive
warm-hearted
the young man Near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving.
be in trouble
anxious
the young man The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
anxious
polite
the people Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
curious
the people The young woman in front of him, she looked at the suitcase and then at him. suspicious
My dad “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” careful
cautious
寫作構(gòu)架
part2
平行性
延續(xù)性
三種敘述模式
交叉性
浙江省高考真題 2020年1月
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
01
stopped a taxi and went into
02
realized that the young man might be the bank robber
03
continued running faster
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
Plot Design
04
asked the taxi driver to go to the police station
Paragraph 1
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” However, Arthur continued running faster just as realizing the young man following behind was the real bank robber. Arthur stopped a taxi and went into it fleetly. He asked the taxi driver to go to the police station as fast as possible and told the driver what had happened.
平行敘述
01
02
03
04
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
However, Arthur continued running faster just as realizing the young man following behind was the real bank robber.
Arthur stopped a taxi and went into it fleetly.
He asked the taxi driver to go to the police station as fast as possible and told the driver what had happened.
浙江省高考真題 2020年1月
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
01
rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office
02
the police got to know what had happened to him.
03
Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase.
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Plot Design
Paragraph 2
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly. There, the police got to know what had happened to him. Arthur returned to the spot, accompanied by the police. The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people. After hearing the young man’s states, everyone was relieved that the young men was not the bank robber and the loud noise of the alarm was incorrectly made by the bank’s system. Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase.
延續(xù)性敘述
01
02
03
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly.
There, the police got to know what had happened to him.
Arthur returned to the spot , accompanied by the police.
The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people.
延續(xù)性敘述
01
02
03
04
05
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly.
There, the police got to know what had happened to him.
Arthur returned to the spot , accompanied by the police.
The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people.
After hearing the young man’s states, everyone was relieved that the young men was not the bank robber and the loud noise of the alarm was incorrectly made by the bank’s system.
Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase..
潤色批改
part3
詞匯潤色
went into the taxi fleetly --- rolled onto it and
slammed the door shut.
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled
onto it and slammed the door shut.
一般動詞
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
詞匯潤色
---and said: “Hurry up! Police station, please.”
---stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
---utter 以口發(fā)出聲音
一般動詞
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
詞匯潤色
he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
一般動詞
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
詞匯潤色
tell the story to the police officer — narrated the
whole story to the police officer narrated the whole
story to the police officer in great detail.
narrate 更好的表達(dá)了細(xì)節(jié)表達(dá)— Arthur 著急把所
有發(fā)生的事情講出來
一般動詞
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
詞匯潤色
---found the young man
---recognized the young man
---the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the
incident happened and immediately recognized the
young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
一般動詞
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
詞匯潤色
著急(連貫的身體動作)
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi,
rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
情緒狀態(tài)
身體表征
詞匯潤色
著急(動作表明著急緊張)
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail. ......
保持了正片續(xù)寫文章的情緒和節(jié)奏。
情緒狀態(tài)
身體表征
詞匯潤色
形式主語：It suddenly dawned on him that
強調(diào)：It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath.
狀語從句
單一狀語
多樣狀語
詞匯潤色
獨立主格：
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he
could hardly utter a complete sentence, but
stammered, …
定語從句：
... recognized the young man ... who he suspected
was the bank robber.
狀語從句
單一狀語
多樣狀語
Paragraph 1
As he was running, Arthur heard young man shouting behind. 【1】However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly. 【2】It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber. 【3】In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut. 【4】Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!” 【5】It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
ignored/continued/hold tightly表明Arthur著急離開，而且有點緊張
身體表征
holding the suitcase tightly 描寫出Arthur緊張的情緒。
多樣狀語
at full speed (介詞短語.)/ tightly(adv.)
However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly.
Paragraph 1
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細(xì)節(jié)動詞
rolled onto it / slammed the door shut 一系列的動作表明著急緊張
身體表征
roll onto it 描寫Arthur很著急
多樣狀語
in a flurry of activities(介詞短語)
It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber. In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
02
Paragraph 1
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
utter a sentence / stammered 寫出了Arthur著急和緊張害怕的情緒
身體表征
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching 通過面部的描述，加強他的著急緊張情緒
多樣狀語
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching(獨立主格)
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “ Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
04
Paragraph 1
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
screeched forward 動態(tài)動作和文章表達(dá)的緊張感一致
身體表征
caught his breath 對于上文的緊張和著急的進一步加強
多樣狀語
It was only after...(強調(diào)句)
It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
05
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 2
The taxi stopped in front of the police station and Arthur jumped out of the taxi. 【1】Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.【2】 Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber. 【3】It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered. 【4】Smiling apologetically at the young man, Arthur passed him his suitcase.
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
narrated 相比 say, tell 等更生動，并且和句尾的介詞短語呼應(yīng)，詳細(xì)的描述了發(fā)生的事情
身體表征
Running inside without pausing for breath 描寫出Arthur著急的情緒
多樣狀語
in great detail(介詞短語)
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.
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Paragraph 2
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
recognized / suspected 表明到了現(xiàn)場 對于之前認(rèn)為這個男人是竊賊的遲疑
身體表征
immediately recogized 副詞增強了動詞的意義
多樣狀語
accompanied by the police (分詞短語)
Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
02
Paragraph 2
細(xì)節(jié)動詞
smile / pass 最后誤解解除，Arthur微笑著把手提包還給了年輕人。
身體表征
smiling apologetically 用副詞表達(dá)表情動作
多樣狀語
It is not until ... that ... (強調(diào)句)
It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered.
Paragraph 2
03
However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly.
It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber.
01
02
簡單句
狀語：非謂語
復(fù)雜句
形式主語+從句
Paragraph 1
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
03
04
簡單句
狀語：介詞短語
簡單句
狀語：獨立主格
Paragraph 1
It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
05
復(fù)雜句
狀語：非謂語
Paragraph 1
強調(diào)句
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.
01
簡單句
狀語：非謂語
Paragraph 2
Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
02
復(fù)雜句
狀語：非謂語
Paragraph 2
定語從句
It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered.
03
強調(diào)句+復(fù)合句
狀語從句
Paragraph 2
內(nèi)容互批表
得分點 是 否 改正次數(shù)
P1第一句“承上”
P1最后一句“啟下”
P1主要分別描寫第1/2主人公或第1/2主人公的互動
P2第一句“承上”
P2三句話以內(nèi)解決矛盾
內(nèi)容互批表
得分點 是 否 改正次數(shù)
P2結(jié)尾句升華主旨/以景襯情/回扣原文
P2主要分別描寫第1/2主人公或第1/2主人公的互動
工具人之描寫1次，解決矛盾后就退場
埋伏筆1-3處
直接引語2-3句
易錯點互批表
問題 是 否 改正次數(shù)
每句話都有一個名詞性從句（名詞、代詞、動名詞、主語從句...）
非謂語的邏輯主語和主句的主語一致
時態(tài)一致（都是“過去的某種時態(tài)”）
每個單詞的拼寫都正確
動詞的過去式都正確
易錯點互批表
問題 是 否 改正次數(shù)
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