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2025高考一卷讀后續(xù)寫
一、如何讀原材料：捕捉關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié)要點
閱讀原材料時，需聚焦與人物情感、矛盾沖突及后續(xù)發(fā)展相關(guān)的細(xì)節(jié)，這些細(xì)節(jié)是續(xù)寫的重要依據(jù)：
人物情感細(xì)節(jié)：
哥哥因狗被禁而不滿離開，“Not a chance” 的回復(fù)體現(xiàn)其憤怒；“我” 從最初認(rèn)為哥哥會 “get over it” 到良心不安，情感有轉(zhuǎn)變；哥哥喪妻、健康不佳，對狗 Toby 極度依賴，Toby 是他的 “constant companion”。
矛盾沖突細(xì)節(jié)：
聚會時 “我” 擔(dān)心 Toby 沖撞孩子，讓其待在戶外，雨后 “我” 仍不讓狗進(jìn)屋，導(dǎo)致哥哥無奈離開，這是核心矛盾。
潛在發(fā)展細(xì)節(jié)：
妻子兩次提議 “我” 聯(lián)系哥哥，為后續(xù) “我” 的行動提供了側(cè)面推動；Toby 活潑友好，可能在和解中發(fā)揮作用。
二、根據(jù)每段首句構(gòu)思內(nèi)容及語言生成
（一）第一段 “I realized it was me who was at fault.”
構(gòu)思本段三到四個場景：
場景一：“我” 陷入回憶，意識到自己有錯
場景二：“我” 回想哥哥的處境，明白自己忽視了他的感受
場景三：“我” 為自己沒找折中辦法讓哥哥難堪而愧疚
場景四：妻子看出 “我” 的愧疚，準(zhǔn)備餅干讓 “我” 送去賠罪
從簡單語言到完美句子，逐步添加描寫：
場景一：
簡單句：I knew I was wrong when I thought about that day.
逐步添加描寫：As I reflected on what had happened that evening, shame washed over me.（添加時間狀語從句 “as I reflected on...”，讓回憶更具體；用 “shame washed over me” 這種情感描寫，體現(xiàn) “我” 強(qiáng)烈的愧疚，對應(yīng)原材料中 “my conscience kept bothering me” 的情感）
場景二：
簡單句：My brother was sad, and I didn't care about him.
逐步添加描寫：My brother, already burdened with grief and loneliness, had only sought companionship in Toby, while I had prioritized my own comfort over his feelings.（用 “already burdened with grief and loneliness” 補(bǔ)充哥哥喪妻、健康差的處境，這是原材料中的關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié)；用 “while” 形成對比，突出 “我” 的自私，讓愧疚更有依據(jù)）
場景三：
簡單句：I didn't find a way to solve the problem, and he had no choice.
逐步添加描寫：Instead of finding a compromise by setting up a space indoors for the dog, I had left him little choice. The thought of him spending these months being isolated filled me with deep regret.（“instead of finding a compromise” 具體指出 “我” 的錯誤做法，與原材料中 “我” 不讓狗進(jìn)屋的行為對應(yīng)；“filled me with deep regret” 強(qiáng)化愧疚的情感描寫）
場景四：
簡單句：My wife saw I was sorry and baked biscuits for me to take to him.
逐步添加描寫：Seeing this, my wife decided to do something, so she baked some biscuits for me to bring to my brother.（“seeing this” 銜接上文 “我” 的愧疚狀態(tài)，讓情節(jié)更連貫；“baked some biscuits” 為下一段 “我” 帶餅干上門做鋪墊）
第二段 “With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.”
構(gòu)思本段三到四個場景：
場景一：“我” 帶著餅干到達(dá)哥哥家門口，內(nèi)心緊張
場景二：哥哥開門，看到 “我” 很驚訝
場景三：“我” 遞上餅干并真誠道歉，哥哥態(tài)度有所緩和
場景四：Toby 出現(xiàn)活躍氣氛，兄弟二人和解
從簡單語言到完美句子，逐步添加描寫：
場景一：
簡單句：I took the biscuits and got to my brother's door. I was nervous.
逐步添加描寫：With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. Hesitating, I raised my hand to knock, my heart pounding with uncertainty.（“with the biscuits...” 銜接上一段妻子烤餅干的情節(jié)；“hesitating”“my heart pounding with uncertainty” 通過動作和心理描寫，體現(xiàn) “我” 的緊張，符合去道歉時的狀態(tài)）
場景二：
簡單句：My brother opened the door and was surprised to see me.
逐步添加描寫：When the door opened, my brother’s eyes widened in surprise.（“eyes widened in surprise” 通過神態(tài)描寫，生動展現(xiàn)哥哥的驚訝，讓場景更形象）
場景三：
簡單句：I gave him the biscuits and said sorry. He didn't look so angry.
逐步添加描寫：Before he could speak, I handed him the biscuits, saying sorry to him sincerely. The stiffness in his expression softened slightly.（“before he could speak” 體現(xiàn) “我” 道歉的急切；“sincerely” 強(qiáng)調(diào)道歉的誠意；“the stiffness...softened slightly” 描寫哥哥態(tài)度的變化，為和解鋪墊）
場景四：
簡單句：Toby came over. My brother smiled. We talked happily.
逐步添加描寫：It was at this moment that Toby bounced over, wagging his tail merrily. A faint smile touched my brother’s lips, which spread into a brilliant smile. The next few hours witnessed us taking a walk outside and talking open-heartedly.（“bounced over, wagging his tail merrily” 描寫 Toby 的活潑，呼應(yīng)原材料中其 “friendly” 的特質(zhì)；通過 “a faint smile...spread into a brilliant smile” 的神態(tài)變化，展現(xiàn)哥哥情緒的轉(zhuǎn)變；“taking a walk outside and talking open-heartedly” 描繪和解后的場景，讓結(jié)局更完整）
三、從句到篇：形成最終范文
將上述各場景的句子按照邏輯順序串聯(lián)起來，注意句子之間的銜接與過渡，形成連貫的段落，進(jìn)而組成完整的范文。
第一段中，從 “我” 意識到錯誤的回憶，到分析自己對哥哥的忽視，再到因哥哥被孤立而愧疚，最后妻子準(zhǔn)備餅干，各句圍繞 “我” 的愧疚情感展開，銜接自然。
第二段中，從 “我” 到達(dá)哥哥家門口的緊張，到哥哥開門的驚訝，再到 “我” 道歉、哥哥態(tài)度緩和，最后 Toby 促成和解，情節(jié)逐步推進(jìn)，邏輯清晰。
四、最終范文展示
I realized it was me who was at fault. As I reflected on what had happened that evening, shame washed over me. My brother, already burdened with grief and loneliness, had only sought companionship in Toby, while I had prioritized my own comfort over his feelings. Instead of finding a compromise by setting up a space indoors for the dog, I had left him little choice. The thought of him spending these months being isolated filled me with deep regret. Seeing this, my wife decided to do something, so she baked some biscuits for me to bring to my brother.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. Hesitating, I raised my hand to knock, my heart pounding with uncertainty. When the door opened, my brother’s eyes widened in surprise. Before he could speak, I handed him the biscuits, saying sorry to him sincerely. The stiffness in his expression softened slightly. It was at this moment that Toby bounced over, wagging his tail merrily. A faint smile touched my brother’s lips, which spread into a brilliant smile. The next few hours witnessed us taking a walk outside and talking open-heartedly.

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