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(共22張PPT)
2025年廣一模
讀后續寫
學習目標
(1)回顧廣東省一模寫作任務，從情節、情感，矛盾沖突與結局主題角度理解故事主旨。
(2)學習構建關鍵四句話的步驟，并運用本課所學技能潤色考場原作文。
Review 解題步驟
1. “五找”讀原文
找大意，找人物，找三線 （時空線 情節線 情感線），找沖突，找主題
2.“四句”定框架
Para.1 首句銜接句（銜1）
Para.1 結尾句（銜2）
Para.2 首句銜接句（銜3）
Para.2 尾句
3.“六所”補三線
4.檢查潤色
Para.1:Fauna dreamed of keeping a pet . Her parents always replied “ We’ll see ” .
Para.2-3 :
She found
a lost dog and took it home.
Para.4 :
Her mother reminded they needed to find the dog’s owner.
Para.5 :She and her mother posted flyers to find its ower, meanwhile she and the dog (Buddy) grew inseparable.
Para.6 :
The dog’s owner called her family.
Para.1
Para.2
Emotion
Plot
Beginning
Ending
Climax
Analyze the plot, emotion, conflict, theme of the story
eager
curious, hopeful;
joyful
reluctant
attached依戀的 but torn猶豫的
sad/sorrowful
The Right Thing to Do
Fauna had always dreamed of keeping a pet. Time and again, she asked her parents, promising to walk, feed, and look after it. Each time, though, they gave the same gentle response: “We'll see.”
One afternoon, on her way home from school, Fauna saw a little dog wandering near the park. Its fur was messy, and it looked lost, sniffing the ground as if searching for something. Feeling curious and hopeful, Fauna bent down and called to it. The dog quickly ran over, wagging（搖）its tail and gently pressing its nose into her hand，like they had known each other forever.
She looked around, but no one seemed to be searching for the dog. Feeling pity for the lost dog, Fauna decided to take it home. As they walked side by side,her heart swelled with joy. It felt as though this was the pet she had always dreamed of-a friend she had been waiting for.
At the front door, Fauna's mother greeted her with a warm smile. Although she found the dog adorable, she gently reminded Fauna that they needed to try and find its owner. If the dog was lost, someone must be missing it. Fauna reluctantly（不情愿地）agreed, though part of her wished no one would come forward to claim the little dog.
Over the next few days, Fauna and the dog-whom she named Buddy-grew inseparable. She fed him, played with him,and let him sleep curled up at the foot of her bed. Every day, it became harder to imagine lie without him. Buddy seemed happy too,wagging his tail whenever she came home from school. But Fauna knew deep down that she had to do the right thing. She and her parents posted flyers around town,hoping to find Buddy's owner.
Just a few days later, the phone rang. Fauna's heart sank as her father answered.From the conversation, it was clear that the caller was Buddy's owner. He described Buddy perfectly-the friendly eyes and playful personality. Fauna knew Buddy would soon be leaving her. Her father arranged for the owner to come by and pick Buddy up.
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy.___________________________
That evening,Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind._______
Fauna
her parents
a little dog
Buddy
owner
Underline “who, when, and where” in the passage
The story is about Fauna, who found near the park, took it back and helped find its .
a lost dog
home
owner
Para.1:Fauna dreamed of keeping a pet . Her parents always replied “ We’ll see ” .
Para.2-3 :
She found
a lost dog and took it home.
Para.4 :
Her mother reminded they needed to find the dog’s owner.
Para.5 :She and her mother posted flyers to find its ower, meanwhile she and the dog (Buddy) grew inseparable.
Para.6 :
The dog’s owner called her family.
Para.1
Para.2
Emotion
Plot
Beginning
Ending
Climax
Analyze the plot, emotion, conflict, theme of the story
Conflict
Keeping a pet VS “We’ll see”
Conflict
Returning Buddy VS Her Sadness
Theme: Self-growth
Moral responsibility VS Personal feelings
Activity 1： Analyze the given sentences
Para.1: When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. 當那個人到達時，小狗直接跑進他的懷里，高興地叫著。 Para.2: That evening,Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy’s absence had left behind.
那天晚上，Fauna 靜靜地坐在他的房間里，感受著Buddy不在后留下的空虛
銜1 銜3
銜2 尾句
(theme/ending)
......
......
Activity 1： Analyze the given sentences
Para.1: When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. 當那個人到達時，小狗直接跑進他的懷里，高興地叫著。 Para.2: That evening,Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind.
那天晚上，Fauna 靜靜地坐在他的房間里，感受著Buddy不在后留下的空虛
銜1 銜3
銜2 尾句
(theme/ending)
......
......
What did the man/Fauna react
What did Fauna think of
Eg:
The man +動作，感官，and 語言
Fauna felt +情感 when she watched...
Seeing..., a mixture of ...
Reaction: body movement/facial expressions/ words/ feeling etc.
How did Fauna feel when they walked away
Eg: It was at that moment that she knew...
What did Fauna realize
Eg:
memories
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. 銜1_____________________________________________________________________
A.
B.
C
D
Which is the most suitable transitional sentence for A1
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. _______________
A.
Tip1: 情感協同
該句需要延續Fauna 的悲傷情緒或者復雜情感，不會出現激動exciting的情緒。
Para.6: Just a few days later, the phone rang. Fauna’s heart sank as her father answered.
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
B.
C.
E.g. Para3: Feeling pity for the lost dog, Fauna decided to take it home.
Para2: Feeling curious and hopeful, Fauna bent down and called to it.
Tip 2: 原文語言協同
B,C兩句情感協同合理，但C句符合原文語言協同，心理描寫居多，且多處使用非謂語doing做狀語結構，表達其行為或情感)
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. _______________
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
D.
Buddy leaped into the man’s arms and licked his face excitedly. “ I’ve found you!” The man exclaimed with tears in his eyes.
Tip 3: 情節協同
D句存在語法錯誤，對話不自然。如需關注動詞，需注意動作的連續性，ran into his arms 已建立動態場景， 后續動作切勿重復，可加新細節，如肢體接觸、聲音變化。
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. _______________
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
參考范文：Fauna stood back and watched as Buddy wagged his tail excitedly, clearly recognizing the man.
銜2 .
That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind._______
A.
B.
C.
D.
Which is the most suitable transitional sentence
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
銜2 .
That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind._______
A.
Which is the most suitable transitional sentence
情節協同&主題協同
A句中繼續養小狗和續寫第二段第一句Buddy’s absense相矛盾，與主題 The right thing to do也相矛盾
C句中決定購買新小狗不適合出現在續寫第一段內容，無法推動后續Fauna 空虛之感。
C.
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
銜2 .
That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind._______
D.
Which is the most suitable transitional sentence
情節協同&原文語言協同
B情節不合理，D句情節情感合理，并且與原文語言協同（狀語從句居多）
Activity 2： Multiple-choice
B.
參考范文：Watching Buddy wag his tail happily as they walked away, she felt a deep sadness.
Summary
主題協同
原文語言協同
情節協同
情感協同
讀后續寫原文
語言準確度
Activity 3： Rewrite the following two sentences
Para.2: That evening,Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy’s absence had left behind.
那天晚上，Fauna 靜靜地坐在他的房間里，感受著Buddy不在后留下的空虛
銜3
尾句
......
學生第五檔作文
第二段續寫參考范本
That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind. She missed his warm presence, the gentle weight of him curled up by her feet. Her mother knocked and came in, “You did a brave thing, Fauna. You gave Buddy and his owner a chance to be happy again,” she said softly. Just as Fauna began to feel a little better, her mother continued, “Your dad and I were talking... maybe it's time to adopt our own dog.” Fauna's eyes lit up with hope. She knew that, despite the sadness of saying goodbye to Buddy, there might be a new friend waiting for her soon. (95 words) 自然性結尾
版本2 She missed the warmth of having him there. Just then, her mom came in, her eyes twinkling with excitement. She stepped aside, revealing a small puppy behind her. Fauna's eyes widened in surprise. She gently took the puppy into her arms, feeling its tiny warmth. Her mom smiled. “He's all yours, Fauna. We wanted you to have a friend who could stay forever.” Fauna hugged the puppy close, tears welling up in her eyes—not from sadness this time, but from pure joy. (82words)
Checklist Your performance
I know the plot, emotion, conflict, theme of this continuation writing. 5 4 3 2 1
I know how to analyze two given sentences 5 4 3 2 1
I know how to write the four key sentences 5 4 3 2 1
What impresses me most: I still need to improve: Activity 4： Self-assessment
Homework
Compulsory homework：
1. Rewite your own writing.
2. Write down four key sentences in continuation writing on your work sheet. (2025.1浙江首考）
Optional homework：
Finish the whole writing on your work sheet. (2025.1浙江首考）
2025年1月浙江首考
Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things. Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (嘆息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.
Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly. Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window. “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.
The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回響) in the air. The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out. Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth ” he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.
When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them.___________________________
Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station._______

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