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第4講　續寫熱門話題　人與動物
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
　　I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鳥), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs(蛛網) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
　　With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
　　When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
　　As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering(懸停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
　　During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good-bye.”
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150左右；
2. 請按如下格式作答。
　　A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿
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　　I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. ＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿＿
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寫作指導：
Ⅰ. 梳理原文細節，理清篇章結構。
Ⅱ. 依據首句提示，構思后續情節。
第一段：由續寫第一段及續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述我途經那間擠奶房時回想起上一回拯救蜂鳥的經歷，以及享用燒烤的過程。
第二段：由續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述兩方面的內容：一是蜂鳥與我之間的互動交流；二是關于人與動物關系的啟示。
范文佳作：
　　A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. I still remembered my friends' promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window. To my satisfaction，no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more. As I approached the farm，I was greeted by a spicy smell of the barbecue，urging me to walk faster. We were totally immersed in the peaceful atmosphere，enjoying the delicate cuisine，talking about our interesting experiences and singing songs till the sun set. The evening glow spreading across the farm，it was time for us to say good-bye so we went to the parking lot together.
　　I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. With a squeaking call, she dived towards me and hovered before my face, looking at me with her bright eyes. Then she stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colourful feathers. And I took out my water bottle，trying to give her some water. Content and joyful，she flew about 2 meters above the ground, turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again. At that moment，happiness and the feeling of being moved mingled, welling up into my heart，tears rolling down my cheeks.
話題佳句：
1. The dog turned around, eyeing us, with his tail swinging up and down.
這只狗轉過身來，上下擺動著尾巴，注視著我們。
2. At first the bird stuck his head out of his cage just to take a sip of water and fill his mouth with food.
起初，這只鳥把頭探出籠子，只是為了喝一口水，往嘴里塞滿食物。
3. Afraid I might hurt the lovely small creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse.
我害怕會傷害這個可愛的小生物，我不假思索，發出一聲喊聲來阻止我的馬。
4. Confused and frightened at my approach, the wolf backed off, pulling hard the chain.
狼被我的靠近弄得既困惑又害怕，向后退卻，使勁地拉著鏈子。
5. Birds were singing, the air was filled with laughter, and everyone was in the best of moods.
鳥兒在歌唱，空氣中充滿了笑聲，每個人都沉浸在愉悅當中。
6. The wolf edged closer, ears upright, body tense, and stopped a few yards off, her bushy tail wagging slightly.
狼慢慢靠近了，耳朵豎起，身體繃緊，在幾碼遠的地方停了下來，毛茸茸的尾巴微微擺動著。
7. At the sight of me, the dog circled around me, wagging his tail and licking my hands cheerfully.
一看到我，這只狗就圍著我轉圈，高興地搖動著尾巴舔著我的手。
8. Shaking with fear, I approached it cautiously and saw that it was a pigeon. It looked at me in fear, trying to open its wings and struggling its feet, but apparently powerless.
我心驚膽戰、小心翼翼地靠近它，發現是一只鴿子。它恐懼地看著我，試圖張開翅膀，雙腳在掙扎，但明顯力不從心。
9. Whenever I sat at the table eating biscuits, it looked up at me, cooing(咕咕地叫) constantly. To my joy, I could also reach into the cage to touch it. When I gently fingered its head, it playfully pecked(啄) at me.
每當我坐在桌旁吃餅干，它就看著我，不斷咕咕叫。令我高興的是，我可以把手伸進籠子撫摸它。當我摸它頭的時候，它會開玩笑似的啄我。
10. The dog firmly grabbed my trousers and motioned me to the kitchen. As I approached the kitchen, I could obviously smell a strong burning scent and instantly knew what had happened.
這只狗咬住我的褲子，拉我去廚房。當我走向廚房時，我明顯地聞到強烈的燒焦味，立刻就意識到發生了什么。
11. With Indigo, our baby dog，passing away, our house seemed quiet as a tomb, messy and lifeless.
由于我們的小狗Indigo死了，我們的房子似乎像墳墓一樣死寂，雜亂無章且毫無生氣。
12. In the wild and somewhat silly moments of raising an orphaned baby squirrel, our children learned to value and appreciate life.
在野外，通過有些犯傻地收養孤零零的小松鼠，我們的孩子們學會了珍視生命。
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專題二　讀后續寫
第4講　續寫熱門話題　人與動物
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
　　I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鳥), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs(蛛網) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
　　With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
　　When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
　　As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering(懸停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
　　During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good-bye.”
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150左右；
2. 請按如下格式作答。
　　A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. ___________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
　　I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. _______
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
寫作指導：
Ⅰ. 梳理原文細節，理清篇章結構。
Ⅱ. 依據首句提示，構思后續情節。
第一段：由續寫第一段及續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述我途經那間擠奶房時回想起上一回拯救蜂鳥的經歷，以及享用燒烤的過程。
第二段：由續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述兩方面的內容：一是蜂鳥與我之間的互動交流；二是關于人與動物關系的啟示。
范文佳作：
　　A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. I still remembered my friends' promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window. To my satisfaction，no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more. As I approached the farm，I was greeted by a spicy smell of the barbecue，urging me to walk faster. We were totally immersed in the peaceful atmosphere，enjoying the delicate cuisine，talking about our interesting experiences and singing songs till the sun set. The evening glow spreading across the farm，it was time for us to say good-bye so we went to the parking lot together.
　　I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. With a squeaking call, she dived towards me and hovered before my face, looking at me with her bright eyes. Then she stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colourful feathers. And I took out my water bottle，trying to give her some water. Content and joyful，she flew about 2 meters above the ground, turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again. At that moment，happiness and the feeling of being moved mingled, welling up into my heart，tears rolling down my cheeks.
話題佳句：
1. The dog turned around, eyeing us, with his tail swinging up and down.
這只狗轉過身來，上下擺動著尾巴，注視著我們。
2. At first the bird stuck his head out of his cage just to take a sip of water and fill his mouth with food.
起初，這只鳥把頭探出籠子，只是為了喝一口水，往嘴里塞滿食物。
3. Afraid I might hurt the lovely small creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse.
我害怕會傷害這個可愛的小生物，我不假思索，發出一聲喊聲來阻止我的馬。
4. Confused and frightened at my approach, the wolf backed off, pulling hard the chain.
狼被我的靠近弄得既困惑又害怕，向后退卻，使勁地拉著鏈子。
5. Birds were singing, the air was filled with laughter, and everyone was in the best of moods.
鳥兒在歌唱，空氣中充滿了笑聲，每個人都沉浸在愉悅當中。
6. The wolf edged closer, ears upright, body tense, and stopped a few yards off, her bushy tail wagging slightly.
狼慢慢靠近了，耳朵豎起，身體繃緊，在幾碼遠的地方停了下來，毛茸茸的尾巴微微擺動著。
7. At the sight of me, the dog circled around me, wagging his tail and licking my hands cheerfully.
一看到我，這只狗就圍著我轉圈，高興地搖動著尾巴舔著我的手。
8. Shaking with fear, I approached it cautiously and saw that it was a pigeon. It looked at me in fear, trying to open its wings and struggling its feet, but apparently powerless.
我心驚膽戰、小心翼翼地靠近它，發現是一只鴿子。它恐懼地看著我，試圖張開翅膀，雙腳在掙扎，但明顯力不從心。
9. Whenever I sat at the table eating biscuits, it looked up at me, cooing(咕咕地叫) constantly. To my joy, I could also reach into the cage to touch it. When I gently fingered its head, it playfully pecked(啄) at me.
每當我坐在桌旁吃餅干，它就看著我，不斷咕咕叫。令我高興的是，我可以把手伸進籠子撫摸它。當我摸它頭的時候，它會開玩笑似的啄我。
10. The dog firmly grabbed my trousers and motioned me to the kitchen. As I approached the kitchen, I could obviously smell a strong burning scent and instantly knew what had happened.
這只狗咬住我的褲子，拉我去廚房。當我走向廚房時，我明顯地聞到強烈的燒焦味，立刻就意識到發生了什么。
11. With Indigo, our baby dog，passing away, our house seemed quiet as a tomb, messy and lifeless.
由于我們的小狗Indigo死了，我們的房子似乎像墳墓一樣死寂，雜亂無章且毫無生氣。
12. In the wild and somewhat silly moments of raising an orphaned baby squirrel, our children learned to value and appreciate life.
在野外，通過有些犯傻地收養孤零零的小松鼠，我們的孩子們學會了珍視生命。

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