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寫作進階
第二部分　讀后續(xù)寫
第四講　續(xù)寫銜接、點題
一、寫好四句，3句銜接與主旨升華
1．四個順暢呼應，進行有效銜接
(1)續(xù)寫首句與給出的首段首句的銜接；
(2)續(xù)寫首段尾句與給出的次段首句的銜接；
(3)給出的次段首句與續(xù)寫次段首句的銜接；
(4)文章結(jié)尾升華與文章主題意義的銜接。
2．圍繞“真善美”，傳遞正能量
續(xù)寫故事的內(nèi)容一定要傳遞正能量，圍繞“真善美”的大主題設計情節(jié)，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀，因此續(xù)寫結(jié)尾要按此進行主旨升華。
二、3句銜接語與主旨升華的常用方法和句式
1．做好銜接的基本方法
(1)提示句的主語繼續(xù)成為續(xù)寫的第一句的主語
(2)提示句的某個關鍵詞成為一個新的主語
(3)續(xù)寫第一段的最后一句的主語和續(xù)寫第二段的首句主語一致，使得段落連貫一致
[點撥] 根據(jù)情況以上規(guī)則可以靈活變通，如續(xù)寫第二段的首句主語一致可以作為續(xù)寫第一段的最后一句的賓語。但無論如何要保持語義連貫一致。
2．銜接過渡語的常用句式
(1)形容詞(短語)作狀語
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.Anxious and full of expectation, he took the popcorn around to the houses and began to sell his popcorn.
一切準備就緒后，伯納德開始著手他的新生意。既焦慮又滿懷期待，他拿著爆米花挨家挨戶地開始售賣。
(2)非謂語動詞作狀語
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.Seeing his face filled with anxiety，I felt sad, deciding to talk something with him.
我們緊挨著坐了下來，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我?？粗浅錆M焦慮的臉，我感到很難過，決定和他說點什么。
(3)倒裝句銜接
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.In no time did their father seem to understand exactly what had happened and what to do next.
當雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了。他們的父親似乎很快就明白了到底發(fā)生了什么事，下一步該怎么辦。
(4)介詞短語或副詞作狀語銜接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.Much to my surprise/Surprisingly, I beat a lot of participants and won the first prize.
幾個星期后，當我?guī)缀跬洷荣惖臅r候，傳來了消息。令我吃驚的是，我打敗了很多參賽者，獲得了第一名。
(5)對話或者獨白銜接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.“Congratulations! Your efforts paid off！” said he smilingly.
頒獎典禮結(jié)束后，我去了老師的辦公室?！白ＹR你！ 你的努力得到了回報！”他微笑著說。
(6)狀語從句銜接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.The minute I stepped in, he laughed out loud again as has had before, and said“Congratulations！”
頒獎典禮結(jié)束后，我去了老師的辦公室。我一進門，他又像以前一樣大笑起來，說“祝賀你！”
3．主旨升華的常用方法和句式
6種主旨升華的方法
(1)名言結(jié)尾法
需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一定要具體文本，具體分析。
①(2022·1月浙江卷)Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
正如俗話說，一個人可以走得很遠，但一群人可以走得更遠。
②Just as the saying puts，“Where there is a will, there is a way.” Now I couldn't agree more.
正如俗話所說，“有志者，事竟成?！爆F(xiàn)在我完全同意。
(2)情感升華法
Seeing the javelin，I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying，“You've found your talent and I've found you.”
看到標槍，我覺得它好像在鼓勵我，并說，“你找到了你的天賦，我找到了你?！?br/>(3)運用修辭法
①I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene—we were robbed by a polar bear.
我迅速拿出相機，拍下了這一罕見的場景——我們被一只北極熊搶劫了。
②That affection towards our family is like a touch of green tea, refreshing and heartwarming.
那份對我們家人的感情像一杯清茶，沁人心脾，溫暖人心。
(4)首尾呼應法
①A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
一天，在亞瑟上班的路上發(fā)生了一件有趣的事情。
②What a funny day! Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this happy experience.
多么有趣的一天?。?每當亞瑟想起這次歡樂的經(jīng)歷，他就忍不住笑個不停。
(5)感悟體會法
①(2024·濰坊市五縣市高三10月統(tǒng)考)From the experience，I was fully aware of the responsibility and great value as a doctor, which, therefore, inspired me to continue to pursue my dream.
從這些經(jīng)驗中，我充分意識到作為一名醫(yī)生的責任和巨大的價值，因此，這激發(fā)了我繼續(xù)追求我的夢想。
②I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control.It is love that makes the world go around, which I felt deep in my heart.
我緊緊地握著紙袋，眼淚禁不住流了下來。正是愛讓這世界轉(zhuǎn)動，在我心里深深感受到了這一點。
(6)畫面定格法
①The children said loudly，“Happy Mother's Day！” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
孩子們大聲說：“母親節(jié)快樂！”媽媽緊緊地擁抱著他們，一次又一次地吻著他們。
②In the evening, Dad came back.I proudly took out my own money and handed it to Dad.
那天晚上，爸爸回來了。我驕傲地拿出了我自己的錢，遞給了爸爸。
5種常用句式
(1)only引起的倒裝句
①Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way.
直到那時我才意識到，正是勇敢才能克服前進道路上的一切困難。
②Only when we open up the door of our heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love.
只有當我們打開心門，我們才能沐浴在燦爛的陽光下享受愛的溫暖。
(2)強調(diào)句型
It was a simple knot and an understanding heart that saved me from the awkward situation.
正是這一個簡單的繩結(jié)和一顆善解人意的心將我從尷尬中拯救出來。
(3)From then on＋表行動的句子
①From then on，I made up my mind to pass on“l(fā)ove” to others.
從那以后，我下定決心向別人傳遞“愛”。
②From that day on, every time I meet someone who needs help，I always reach out to them, hoping to pass on the kindness that Mexican family offered me.
從那天起，每當我遇到需要幫助的人，我總是伸出手去幫助他們，希望把墨西哥家庭給予我的善良傳遞下去。
(4)Sometimes＋表感悟類的句子
①Sometimes，a moment of kindness could mean so much to another, and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
有時候，那一刻的善良對另一個人來說意義重大，而一個簡單的行為可以使世界變得如此美好。
②Sometimes a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.
有時候一個小小的善舉可能會產(chǎn)生巨大的影響。
(5)綜合型組合公式：結(jié)果＋難忘的經(jīng)歷＋體悟
I thought about what had just happened.What I was eager to utter was that it was such an exceedingly memorable experience that I would never forget.
我想了想剛才發(fā)生的事。我急切想說的是，這是一次極其難忘的經(jīng)歷，我永遠不會忘記。
【典例示范】
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education.A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities.From age 14, he worked.And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass(超過) anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team.In poor weather，I read about sports or practiced my trombone(長號)．
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.Then we began again.This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle.It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said，“A job's a big step to growing up.I'm glad you will be contributing to the household.” My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested.I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右。
When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me.
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.
【范文賞讀】
When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me.Obviously(副詞作狀語銜接), my dad would try to persuade me to contribute all my earning.It's never fair.I thought in my mind hopelessly, grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist.After a long silence, he didn't ask as expected, instead, he gently said“How do you plan to spend the money from the farmer？” Without any hesitation, the following words popped out，“There are many things I wanted, such as a new football，a
baseball bat and a pair of sneakers and so on, anything but to pay family expense like you.” At that, my dad nodded and let me keep the money(與第二段首句主語一致)．
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.Staring at my confused expression(分詞作狀語銜接), my dad explained：“Though I can't understand your world of school activities, still I will stand by you”．Moved by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back, I felt a sense of guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself.At exactly that moment，I realized why my father let me have the money—it was his expectation for my future, his encouragement and quiet love.It was this unique experience that made me realize I would never surpass his love for me(強調(diào)句型)．

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