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讀后續(xù)寫進(jìn)階微技能
---動(dòng)作描寫三步法
Learning objectives：
Review(復(fù)習(xí)) the three steps of action description(動(dòng)作描寫) in continuation writing(續(xù)寫);
Master the writing formula / f rmj l / (寫作公式);
use the writing method skillfuly(熟練地) to describe actions .
After class, we need to:
復(fù)習(xí)：動(dòng)作描寫三步法概述和作用
精準(zhǔn)用詞
畫面感強(qiáng)
點(diǎn)
線
將動(dòng)作進(jìn)行拆解形成一條動(dòng)作鏈
環(huán)境描寫
語言描寫
情感描寫
心理描寫
外貌描寫
面
增強(qiáng)畫面感，描寫生動(dòng)形象
概述
動(dòng)作點(diǎn)
動(dòng)作
鏈
動(dòng)作面
動(dòng)作描寫三步法
動(dòng)作點(diǎn)、動(dòng)作鏈、動(dòng)作面
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Memory contest
（比賽記憶學(xué)案上身體部位動(dòng)作描寫詞匯）
動(dòng)作點(diǎn)：公式回顧梳理
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精準(zhǔn)
用詞
精準(zhǔn)
用詞
精準(zhǔn)
用詞
精準(zhǔn)
用詞
精準(zhǔn)
用詞
精準(zhǔn)
用詞
面部動(dòng)作
嘴部動(dòng)作
throw
shake
tremble
push
pull
wrap
pat
pick
grab
clap
hug
remove
wave
flush
flash a smile
bite one’s lip
raise one’s brow
每個(gè)3分
lower
drop
bury
duck
bow
nod
raise
turn
rest
每個(gè)1分
whisper
declare
exclaim
explain
argue
protest
sob
scream
reply
每個(gè)1分
look
watch
see
glare
stare
glimpse
glance
scan
blink
glue
sparkle
eyes meet
exchange a look of
fix one’s
eyes on
march
jump
climb
kneel down
dash
run
rush
tiptoe
pace
limp
drag
freeze
enter
drop one’s
feet
頭部動(dòng)作
眼部動(dòng)作
腿部動(dòng)作
手部動(dòng)作
1分鐘回憶背誦
每個(gè)1分
每個(gè)1分
每個(gè)1分
動(dòng)作鏈：公式回顧
公式1：(動(dòng)作2或3連)
A and B 或 A,B,and C
公式2：非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)
A and B，V -ing 同一對(duì)象發(fā)生不同的動(dòng)作。
Having done ，A 表示動(dòng)作先后關(guān)系。
-ed , A 表示被動(dòng)
公式3：when /while/as/before/after A , B
動(dòng)作鏈：公式運(yùn)用
合作學(xué)習(xí)2’
檢查預(yù)習(xí)作業(yè)完成情況
注意5個(gè)公式的靈活運(yùn)用
場(chǎng)景描述：
She hugged her kid.
公式應(yīng)用
She dashed forward in a hurry,
knelt down and held her son into her arms tightly.
公式1：A,B,and C (動(dòng)作三連)
場(chǎng)景描述：
Mr. Bean attempted to cheat in the exam.
公式應(yīng)用
公式2:
非謂語：-ing現(xiàn)在分詞，同一對(duì)象發(fā)生不同的動(dòng)作。
. A and B， -ing C
During the exam, Mr. Bean looked around and slowly moved towards his deskmate, attempting to glance at his answers.
非謂語：Having done ，A 表示動(dòng)作先后關(guān)系。
場(chǎng)景描述：
票已賣完。
The ticket was sold out.
公式運(yùn)用
Having queued for 3 hours , he was told that the ticket had been sold out.
非謂語動(dòng)詞： -ed , A 表示被動(dòng)
場(chǎng)景描述：
女孩哭了。
The girl cried.
公式運(yùn)用
Deeply moved by the story ,the girl began to cry.
公式3:
when /while/as/before/after A , B
動(dòng)作鏈：
When i arrived at his
home , singing and
dancing, I knocked on
the door.
場(chǎng)景描述：我敲門。
I knocked on the door.
動(dòng)作面：語言欣賞
我很早就醒了，躡手躡腳地走進(jìn)廚房。
I woke up really early and tiptoed to the kitchen.
①懷著默默的期待，我很早就醒了，然后躡手躡腳地走進(jìn)廚房。
Filled with quiet expectation, I woke up really early and tiptoed to the kitchen.
②懷著些許緊張的心情，在清晨的寂靜中，我躡手躡腳地走進(jìn)了廚房。
Feeling slightly nervous, I tiptoed to the kitchen in the early morning silence.
情感描寫
環(huán)境描寫
語言描寫
心理描寫
外貌描寫
面
大聲
朗讀
動(dòng)作面：情感描寫公式
filled with+情緒類名詞(短語)
（feeling)+情緒類形容詞(短語)
1.非謂語動(dòng)詞：seized/overwhelmed/defeated by+
消極類情感名詞： 頓感/不堪/陷入…
2.介詞短語：In a burst of +情感名詞 帶著一陣…
3.無靈主語：a wave/surge陣/hint絲/sort of +情感名詞+
welled up in one’s heart：一陣…涌上心頭
動(dòng)作面：情感描寫 句型訓(xùn)練
________________[感到有希望], Bernard knocked on the door and waited for the first customer.
Jeff wiped the stove(爐灶) with a cloth, his face_____________
______________________ [臉上滿是沮喪].
3. John gently shook the pot, his eyes[眼神里充滿期待] ______________________ , waiting for the popcorn to pop.
4. __________________________ （頓感內(nèi)疚），he stood there
,frozen .
5. ___________________________________ the moment I heard the good news that i won the first prize in the speech contest. (我很開心)
Feeling hopeful
filled with
filled with eagerness
sadness/disappointment
Seized by a sense of guilt,
或者 In a burst of guilt
A wave of delight welled up in my heart
用點(diǎn)、線、面的思路進(jìn)行微場(chǎng)景寫作
注意！
手部動(dòng)作
穿戴
面部表情
語言
用點(diǎn)、線、面的思路進(jìn)行微場(chǎng)景寫作
小組合作完成
The girl cried.
fell into the water
take the hot dog
場(chǎng)景描述：
女孩哭了。
The girl cried.
用點(diǎn)、線、面的思路進(jìn)行微場(chǎng)景寫作
Deeply moved by the story ,in a burst of sadness, the girl began to cry with large bright drops of tears rolling down her cheeks.
請(qǐng)分別用點(diǎn)、線、面的思路進(jìn)行微場(chǎng)景寫作
落水同時(shí)感到？
---> nervous/panic(驚慌n.)/panicked(adj.)
面： The boy slipped and then fell into the water, feeling badly panicked/nervous.
= The boy slipped and fell into the water, filled with nervousness/panic.
The old lady hesitated for a moment, and then reached out with shaking hands to take the hot dog, her lips moving slightly as she whispered a quiet “Thank you.” 她猶豫了一下，然后顫抖著伸出手接過熱狗，嘴唇微微動(dòng)了一下，輕聲說了句“謝謝”。
請(qǐng)分別用點(diǎn)、線、面的思路進(jìn)行微場(chǎng)景寫作
It was a jam-packed day for 24-year-old Justin, While his hot dog stand at the local park in his hometown did well every day, that day was different. The stall was full of customers, and he was struggling to keep up. "3 hot dogs, please!" someone ordered as Justin handed the recent orders, and he quickly got about his work. "Coming right up!" he replied with a smile. "Thank you! Have a nice day!" the customer replied upon receiving the orders, and Justin quickly got busy with the next one. Then he noticed an old woman pushing her way through the crowd to get to his counter（柜臺(tái)）. "Excuse me, son. How much would a hot dog be " she asked, looking at him. "Depends on what you want, ma'am. They range from $3 to $7. You can check out the menu and let me know what you want, " he replied. "But that's expensive for me, " she mumbled (咕噥 ）, looking at the prices. "It's alright. I was just curious how much they cost. I don't want any, " she added before walking away. Justin noticed she went away and sat alone on a bench across from his stand. She kept looking in his direction, meanwhile touching her stomach occasionally, Justin couldn't help watching her because of strong curiosity. She was fully dressed with an information card worn around her neck she might get lost because of something unexpected. Her face wasn't as rosy as others and her lips were dry. Justin wondered whether she would need any help, However, once they made eye contact, she always looked away quickly, Eventually, Justin realized she wanted a hot dog but couldn't afford one, so he stopped what he was doing and walked over to her with food and drink. "I apologize, ma'am. I was in such a rush that I forgot to tell you you're our 50th customer of the day, so you get a free hot dog ' he said upon approaching her. "Let me know how you like it!
Justin gave her the food, noticing some nervousness on her face.___________________________
Assignment
構(gòu)思續(xù)寫老人接受熱狗后的情節(jié)（包含動(dòng)作鏈和情感描寫），續(xù)寫老人接受熱狗后的第一段內(nèi)容，注意和第二段的（家人到來）相關(guān)的內(nèi)容做好銜接，運(yùn)用動(dòng)作鏈和情感描述的公式豐富內(nèi)容 。
精準(zhǔn)用詞
畫面感強(qiáng)
點(diǎn)
線
將動(dòng)作進(jìn)行拆解
形成一條動(dòng)作鏈
環(huán)境描寫
語言描寫
情感描寫
心理描寫
外貌描寫
n
面
老人、賈斯汀Justin、身份信息卡、家人….
Homework:
Memorize the formulas for action and emotion description.
Continue to finish the continuation writing about the old lady and hot dog.

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