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高考英語讀后續寫語篇練習
遛狗風波：家庭合作的成長故事
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題目分析
讀后續寫
題目再現
范文呈現
努力方向
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Part 1
題目呈現
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續寫原文
When I was a kid, my parents and I lived near the forest. They often told me that our family was a team that needed to work together for the household to function smoothly. There was always an abundance of work to do — cooking, cleaning, and walking dogs. I volunteered to walk our dog, Max, who had been adopted one month before. I never dared let this giant dog off the lead (牽狗繩), just in case he took off.
One morning, we were walking along in the forest when Max started pulling on the lead. At first, I was able to hold on despite the wet ground from a recent shower. But the more I tried to stop him pulling, the more it turned into a tug of war. And thanks to the slippery ground, I lost.
Pulling his lead, Max shot off like a bullet, leaving me screaming behind. I chased him but lost my footing and fell face-first into some mud. I stumbled (踉蹌) to my feet, but looking ahead, I found him running back towards me. I thought he was going to stop and give me his “Sorry” look. But instead, the dog shot past me and returned after a while.
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續寫原文
As soon as we got home, my mother immediately attended to Max with a warm towel and a doggy treat. I thought seeing me stumbling and covered in mud, I would also get a warm cup of tea and a motherly kiss. Instead, I got a very loud lecture about letting the dog loose in the forest.
I felt frustrated. It wasn’t fair that she didn’t understand how difficult it was to control Max. I fought back, “Stop lecturing me! Why is everything my fault ” With these words, I stormed into my bedroom and slammed the door shut.
In the evening, I heard my mother call Max and take him out. It wasn’t long before I heard my mother screaming and the door opening again.
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段首句
Paragraph 1：I walked out of my room.
Paragraph 2: Dad stepped in, suggesting that we work together to train Max.
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Part 2
題目分析
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續寫原文分析
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文章講述了小時候，“我” 和父母住在森林附近，“我” 負責遛狗。一次在森林里，狗狗 Max 突然掙脫牽引繩狂奔，“我” 摔倒在泥里，回家后媽媽不僅沒安慰 “我”，反而大聲指責。“我” 委屈地回房。晚上，媽媽帶 Max 出去，傳來尖叫。通過這次經歷，“我” 和媽媽互相理解，在爸爸提議下，全家一起訓練 Max，明白了家庭合作的重要性。
點1：位于續寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；
點2：位于續寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；
點3：位于續寫第二段段首，續寫銜接第二段段首語；
點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。
情節構建的重點
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續寫思路分析
Para 1：I walked out of my room.
我走出房間，眼前的景象讓我驚呆了。媽媽渾身沾滿了泥，頭發凌亂，狼狽不堪，就像我上午那般。Max 耷拉著尾巴，畏畏縮縮地站在一旁，仿佛知道自己闖了大禍。我和媽媽對視了一眼，她眼中的愧疚與無奈清晰可見。媽媽先開了口：“寶貝，我現在才知道控制 Max 有多難，早上不該沖你發火，對不起。” 我眼眶一熱，心里的委屈瞬間消散，忙說道：“媽媽，我也有錯，不該跟您頂嘴，還跑回房間。” 在這一刻，我們的誤會徹底解開。
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續寫思路分析
Para 2：Dad stepped in, suggesting that we work together to train Max.
爸爸見此情形，適時提出一起訓練 Max 的建議。我們一致贊同。從那以后，每天放學后，我們都會來到后院。爸爸耐心地向我們演示正確牽狗繩的方法，講解訓練技巧。我和媽媽則輪流按照爸爸教的方法，帶著 Max 進行練習。一開始，Max 還是會有些調皮，但隨著訓練的深入，它逐漸變得聽話起來。在這個過程中，我們不僅拉近了和 Max 的距離，更深刻體會到了家庭合作的力量。
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Part 3
范文呈現
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范文呈現
I walked out of my room. What greeted me was a shocking sight. My mom was covered in mud from head to toe, her hair a mess, just like I was in the morning. Max stood beside her with his tail between his legs, looking extremely guilty. My mom and I locked eyes, and I could see the guilt and helplessness in her eyes. She spoke first, “Honey, I now realize how difficult it was to control Max. I shouldn't have yelled at you this morning. I'm sorry.” My eyes welled up, and the grievance in my heart vanished instantly. I quickly replied, “Mom, I was wrong too. I shouldn't have talked back to you and run to my room.” At that moment, our misunderstanding was completely cleared up.
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范文呈現
Dad saw this situation and timely suggested that we work together to train Max. We all agreed. From then on, every day after school, we would gather in the backyard. Dad patiently demonstrated the correct way of handling the dog leash and explained training skills. My mom and I took turns practicing with Max according to what Dad taught. At first, Max was still a bit naughty, but as the training went on, he gradually became more obedient. In this process, not only did we get closer to Max, but we also deeply felt the power of family cooperation.
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升級版范文呈現
I walked out of my room. What met my eyes was a disheveled mom, mud - splattered from head to toe, her hair in disarray, mirroring my earlier state. Max, with tail tucked between his legs, cowered nearby, clearly aware of his misdeed. Our eyes met, and in hers, I discerned guilt and regret. “Honey,” she began, “I've come to understand how challenging it was to manage Max. I was wrong to scold you this morning. Forgive me.” Touched, I replied, “Mom, I'm sorry too. I shouldn't have stormed off.” With that, our rift dissolved.
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升級版范文呈現
Dad stepped in, proposing we jointly train Max. We readily agreed. Post - school daily, we'd assemble in the backyard. Dad meticulously demonstrated proper leash - handling, sharing training insights. Mom and I, taking turns, applied his teachings. Initially, Max resisted, but as days passed, he grew more compliant. This experience not only fortified our bond with Max but also, as my parents always preached, instilled in us the true essence of family teamwork.
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Part 4
努力方向
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高級結構
名詞性從句
高級結構
三連動
虛擬語氣
形容詞做狀語
無靈主語
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定語從句
狀語從句
（包含倒裝句）
強調句
副詞做狀語
非謂語
（包括獨立主格）
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