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第二節(jié)(滿(mǎn)分 25 分)
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
In a small town in Iowa, sixteen-year-old Emma Thompson was an ambitious student with dreams of becoming a scientist. Every year, the local high school held a science fair, and Emma had always placed high but never won first place. This year, she was determined to change that.
Emma spent months working on her project, a study on renewable energy using algae(藻類(lèi)). She recorded data, ran experiments, and even stayed up late into the night perfecting her presentation. Her parents often found her working at her laptop, surrounded by books and lab equipment.
One evening, a week before the science fair, Emma was working on her project when her laptop screen suddenly went black. Panicked, she tried to restart it, but it was no use. All her data, notes, and the presentation were on that laptop, and she hadn't backed up her files.
Desperate, Emma took the laptop to the local repair shop. The technician told her it would take at least a week to recover the data if it was even possible. Emma left the shop, feeling a sense of despair. How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days
Returning home, she sat on her bed.fighting back tears. Her mind flashed back to a conversation she had had with her science teacher, Mr. Reynolds, earlier in the year. He told her the true test of a scientist was not in how they handled success, but in how they overcame failure and that innovation often came from the ability to adapt and persevere.
Emma let Mr.Reynolds’ words sink in. She realized that this was her chance to prove herself - as a true scientist. Determined to make the best of her situation, she began to gather all the resources she still had. She found her handwritten notes, some scattered (散亂的) papers, and relied on her memory to recall key points of her research.
Paragraph l: Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.
Paragraph 2: After the fair, the winners were to be announced.
第二節(jié)(滿(mǎn)分 25 分)
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
In a small town in Iowa, sixteen-year-old Emma Thompson was an ambitious student with dreams of becoming a scientist(with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)). Every year, the local high school held a science fair, and Emma had always placed high but never won first place. This year, she was determined to change that.
Emma spent months working on her project, a study on renewable energy(介詞短語(yǔ)做study的后置定語(yǔ)) using algae(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做后置定語(yǔ))(藻類(lèi)). She recorded data, ran experiments, and even stayed up late into the night perfecting her presentation(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作). Her parents often found her working at her laptop, surrounded by(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作) books and lab equipment.
One evening, a week before the science fair, Emma was working on her project when her laptop screen suddenly went black(狀從). Panicked(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做狀語(yǔ)), she tried to restart it, but it was no use. All her data, notes, and the presentation were on that laptop, and she hadn't backed up her files.
Desperate(形容詞做狀語(yǔ)), Emma took the laptop to the local repair shop. The technician told her it would take at least a week to recover the data(賓從) if it was even possible(狀從). Emma left the shop, feeling a sense of despair(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作). How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days
Returning home(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作), she sat on her bed, fighting back tears(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作). Her mind flashed back to a conversation she had had with her science teacher(定從), Mr. Reynolds, earlier in the year. He told her the true test of a scientist was not in(賓從) how they handled success(賓從), but in how they overcame failure(賓從) and that innovation often came from the ability to adapt and persevere(賓從).
Emma let Mr.Reynolds’ words sink in. She realized that this was her chance to prove herself - as a true scientist(賓從). Determined to make the best of her situation(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做狀語(yǔ)), she began to gather all the resources she still had(賓從). She found her handwritten notes, some scattered (散亂的) papers, and relied on her memory to recall key points of her research.
Paragraph l: Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.
Paragraph 2: After the fair, the winners were to be announced.
1. 讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)分類(lèi)與構(gòu)思分析
類(lèi)型分析：
該文章屬于情感轉(zhuǎn)折型（也可稱(chēng)為逆境中的成長(zhǎng)類(lèi)型）讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。文章描述了Emma面臨電腦故障、項(xiàng)目數(shù)據(jù)丟失的困境，她從初始的絕望中找到力量，最終決定不放棄并重新開(kāi)始。續(xù)寫(xiě)的任務(wù)是呈現(xiàn)她如何克服困難，展現(xiàn)成長(zhǎng)與堅(jiān)持。
構(gòu)思思路：
1. 情感遞進(jìn)：
- 從絕望到希望：文章中的Emma在電腦崩潰后的絕望情緒成為情感的起點(diǎn)，續(xù)寫(xiě)要自然承接這種情感轉(zhuǎn)變，通過(guò)Emma的行動(dòng)與心理轉(zhuǎn)折，展現(xiàn)她從失敗中汲取力量，最終展現(xiàn)出她堅(jiān)韌不拔的決心。
2. 行動(dòng)與決心：
- 如何應(yīng)對(duì)困境：續(xù)寫(xiě)要描繪Emma在知曉數(shù)據(jù)丟失后的種種應(yīng)對(duì)措施，如回憶實(shí)驗(yàn)過(guò)程、手工記錄數(shù)據(jù)、重新整理資料等具體行動(dòng)。
- 最終克服困難：最終的結(jié)果可以是她完成了項(xiàng)目，并且在科學(xué)展中取得了好成績(jī)，或許雖然沒(méi)有獲獎(jiǎng)，但她收獲了自信和對(duì)科學(xué)的更深理解。
3. 人物性格與成長(zhǎng)：
- Emma的堅(jiān)韌：她的成長(zhǎng)與堅(jiān)韌是故事的核心，續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)強(qiáng)調(diào)她如何在壓力下保持冷靜，重新開(kāi)始，不斷前進(jìn)。
布局與提煉框架：
- 第一段：
- 情感轉(zhuǎn)折：Emma的絕望轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)闆Q心，決定從頭開(kāi)始。
- 行動(dòng)：收集手寫(xiě)筆記，依賴(lài)記憶重建實(shí)驗(yàn)數(shù)據(jù)。
- 第二段：
- 情感高潮：Emma完成項(xiàng)目，準(zhǔn)備在科學(xué)展上展示，充滿(mǎn)信心。
- 結(jié)果揭示：展示她在科學(xué)展中的表現(xiàn)，可以是獲獎(jiǎng)，也可以是收獲了其他形式的認(rèn)可。
實(shí)施：
- 承接原文：
- 續(xù)寫(xiě)要注意情感上的承接，從“Emma感到絕望”自然過(guò)渡到她的決心與行動(dòng)。
- 細(xì)節(jié)的具體呈現(xiàn)：比如Emma如何利用零散的手寫(xiě)資料重新構(gòu)建數(shù)據(jù)，如何整理思路并進(jìn)行項(xiàng)目展示。
續(xù)寫(xiě)承接原文的注意事項(xiàng)：
1. 情感轉(zhuǎn)折：情感的轉(zhuǎn)變要自然流暢，避免生硬的轉(zhuǎn)變，展示Emma的心理變化。
2. 人物行為：繼承人物的堅(jiān)韌與決心，確保行為符合她的性格。
3. 情感連接：從絕望到重新振作的過(guò)渡要清晰，并展示她的成長(zhǎng)。
4. 細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)：注重環(huán)境細(xì)節(jié)，如她在夜晚整理數(shù)據(jù)、翻閱筆記的場(chǎng)景，以增強(qiáng)人物與環(huán)境的連接。
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故事山元素 內(nèi)容
起點(diǎn) Emma的電腦崩潰，數(shù)據(jù)丟失，情感低谷。
攀升 Emma回憶老師的話(huà)，決定從頭開(kāi)始，收集手寫(xiě)筆記，嘗試重新做實(shí)驗(yàn)。
轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn) 她決定從困境中找到新的方法，用有限的資源重做項(xiàng)目。
高潮 Emma完成了項(xiàng)目，并成功參加科學(xué)展。
結(jié)局 獲得某種形式的認(rèn)可或反響，盡管未必獲得第一名，但她展示了自己的堅(jiān)韌與創(chuàng)新。
2. 故事山模式分析
續(xù)寫(xiě)銜接點(diǎn)：
- 原文情感銜接：原文中Emma從絕望轉(zhuǎn)為希望的心理變化，續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)體現(xiàn)這種內(nèi)心轉(zhuǎn)變。
- 動(dòng)詞與心理：在續(xù)寫(xiě)中要展示Emma的努力與重拾信心的具體動(dòng)作，例如“她開(kāi)始翻閱手寫(xiě)筆記”、“她恢復(fù)了數(shù)據(jù)并開(kāi)始重新做實(shí)驗(yàn)”。
關(guān)鍵句子與短語(yǔ)：
- 心情反映：
- “She felt a sense of despair.” → 續(xù)寫(xiě)可以反映她如何從這種絕望中走出來(lái)，找到新的動(dòng)力。
- “This was her chance to prove herself” → 顯示Emma如何從內(nèi)心恢復(fù)信心并采取實(shí)際行動(dòng)。
- 動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)：
- “She began to gather all the resources she still had.” → 續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)應(yīng)通過(guò)具體的行動(dòng)展現(xiàn)她如何挽回項(xiàng)目，利用有限資源。
- 關(guān)鍵轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)：
- “Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.” → 這是故事的關(guān)鍵轉(zhuǎn)折，標(biāo)志著Emma決定不放棄并采取積極行動(dòng)。
3. 續(xù)寫(xiě)動(dòng)作、心理、環(huán)境描寫(xiě)推薦例句
動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)：
1. Emma immediately opened her handwritten notes, flipping through pages to recall crucial data and experiments.
2. With her hands trembling, Emma started organizing the scattered papers, hoping to piece together the fragments of her research.
3. She took a deep breath, opened her laptop again, and began typing furiously, determined to finish her project on time.
心理描寫(xiě)：
1. Emma’s heart raced with anxiety, but she knew she couldn’t give up now. She had to finish what she started.
2. As she sat down at her desk, the weight of her failure seemed unbearable, but her teacher’s words echoed in her mind, reminding her that true scientists were defined by their ability to persevere.
3. She felt a flicker of hope ignite within her as she realized that, though the task ahead was daunting, she had the strength to face it.
環(huán)境描寫(xiě)：
1. The room was quiet except for the sound of Emma’s pen scratching across the paper, her only companion in the late hours of the night.
2. Emma’s small bedroom was filled with crumpled papers and open textbooks, evidence of her relentless determination to finish her project.
3. The soft glow of the desk lamp illuminated Emma’s tired face as she worked tirelessly, surrounded by the chaos of her work.
高級(jí)詞匯替換：
1. Determined → Resolute, Tenacious, Unyielding
2. Frustrated → Exasperated, Disheartened, Defeated
3. Desperate → Despondent, Hopeless, Struggling
4. 語(yǔ)法分析
語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象：
- 過(guò)去完成時(shí)：表示某一過(guò)去動(dòng)作發(fā)生在另一個(gè)過(guò)去動(dòng)作之前。例如，“She had always placed high but never won first place.”
- 近義詞：had completed, had achieved
- 例句：
1. Emma had been working for months before the fair.
2. She had never seen her project fail until that day.
- 情態(tài)動(dòng)詞：如“could”與“would”，用于表達(dá)能力和未來(lái)假設(shè)。例如，“How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days ”
- 近義詞：might, should
- 例句：
1. She might not be able to finish in time.
2. He would have helped if he had known.
- 定語(yǔ)從句：如“a study on renewable energy using algae,” 其中使用了“using algae”來(lái)修飾“study”。
- 近義詞：which used algae
- 例句：
1. The experiment, which tested renewable energy sources, was a success.
2. The papers that were scattered across the table contained important information.
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5. 范文分析與加分點(diǎn)
語(yǔ)法加分點(diǎn)：
1. 被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)：“The data was recovered by the technician.”
2. 情態(tài)動(dòng)詞：“She might have been able to save the project if she had backed up her files.”
3. 過(guò)去完成時(shí)：“Emma had already gathered her notes before the technician arrived.”
語(yǔ)法加分點(diǎn)：
1. 虛擬語(yǔ)氣：“If she had known about the problem earlier, she would have backed up the data.”
2. 非限定性定語(yǔ)從句：“The project, which was her passion, had to be restarted from scratch.”
語(yǔ)法加分點(diǎn)：
1. 現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)：“She has been working on her project for months.”
2. 動(dòng)名詞：“Collecting data and writing reports took most of her time.”
Possible Answer 1：
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. The night seemed endless, but she refused to let the failure consume her. She opened her handwritten notes(與原文銜接) and, with a steady hand, began organizing the scattered papers(與原文銜接). Her mind raced, recalling the key experiments(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作) she had conducted(定從), the data she had gathered(定從), and the conclusions she had drawn(定從). She had always dreamed of becoming a scientist, and this was the moment she would prove her resilience(定從). The hours flew by as she poured over her notes(狀從), determined to recreate the project(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做補(bǔ)語(yǔ)) she had worked on for months(定從).
After the fair, the winners were to be announced. Although she didn’t win first place(狀從), Emma felt a sense of accomplishment that no ribbon could define(定從). Her teacher, Mr. Reynolds, smiled at her from the back of the room, and Emma knew in that moment that she had passed the true test of a scientist(賓從): perseverance in the face of failure.
Possible Answer 2:無(wú)框架續(xù)寫(xiě)
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.She tried her best to calm down, her hands still trembling(獨(dú)立主格) as she opened her notes again(狀從). The project had seemed impossible to complete, but she refused to give up. As she sifted through her handwritten notes(狀從), she recalled the hours spent experimenting with algae for renewable energy(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做后置定語(yǔ)). Each detail, each result came back to her, and she began to rebuild her presentation. Though the task ahead seemed daunting(狀從), Emma’s resolve strengthened. She was no longer overwhelmed by the setback; instead, she was determined to prove that a true scientist never quits, no matter the circumstances.
When the science fair began, Emma was filled with a sense of quiet pride. She had done her best and shown what she was capable of(賓從). The judges walked by, inspecting the projects(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做伴隨動(dòng)作), and when the winners were announced(狀從), Emma didn’t win first place, but it didn’t matter. As she packed up her materials(狀從), she felt a new sense of confidence. Her perseverance had paid off. Mr. Reynolds gave her an encouraging look, and Emma knew she had earned something far more valuable than a prize (賓從)— the belief in herself and the knowledge that she could overcome any obstacle(定從).
Possible Answer 3 無(wú)框架:
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. She opened her notes and scattered papers across the desk, hoping to reconstruct her project(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作). It wasn’t easy, and she felt the weight of failure pressing down on her shoulders(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做后置定語(yǔ)). But her teacher’s words echoed in her mind: "A true scientist isn’t defined by their successes, but by how they rise after failure(賓從)." With renewed determination, she worked tirelessly, using every resource at her disposal. The hours passed, but Emma didn’t give up. She had lost time, but she hadn’t lost hope. And that made all the difference.
The day of the science fair arrived, and Emma stood before her project, her heart pounding with excitement(獨(dú)立主格). As she presented her findings(狀從), she spoke with newfound confidence, her passion for science evident in every word(獨(dú)立主格). When the judges announced the winners(狀從), Emma didn’t take home first place, but she felt a deep sense of satisfaction. She had proved to herself that she could overcome adversity(賓從), and that was a victory in itself(賓從). Mr. Reynolds gave her a proud nod, and Emma knew that this was only the beginning of her journey as a scientist(賓從).
語(yǔ)法加分點(diǎn)分析：
1. 過(guò)去完成時(shí)：用于描述在過(guò)去某一時(shí)刻之前已經(jīng)完成的動(dòng)作。例如：“Emma had always dreamed of becoming a scientist.”
2. 情態(tài)動(dòng)詞：表達(dá)可能性、能力、必要性等情感。例如：“She might have been able to save the project if she had backed up her files.”
3. 非限定性定語(yǔ)從句：補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明名詞，增加句子的細(xì)節(jié)。例如：“The project, which was her passion, had to be restarted from scratch.”
4. 動(dòng)名詞：表達(dá)動(dòng)作或活動(dòng)作為名詞使用。例如：“Collecting data and writing reports took most of her time.”
5. 虛擬語(yǔ)氣：用于表示與現(xiàn)實(shí)相反的情況，增強(qiáng)假設(shè)與愿望的表達(dá)。例如：“If she had known about the problem earlier, she would have backed up the data.”
情緒描寫(xiě)與動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)亮點(diǎn)詞匯：
- 情緒描寫(xiě)：“Emma felt a sense of despair” → 替換詞：exhausted, disheartened, defeated
- 動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)：“Emma immediately opened her handwritten notes” → 替換詞：flipped through, sifted through, reviewed
替換詞與高級(jí)表達(dá)：
- Determined → Resolute, Tenacious, Unyielding
- Frustrated → Exasperated, Disheartened, Defeated
- Desperate → Despondent, Hopeless, Struggling
第四部分 寫(xiě)作(共兩節(jié)，滿(mǎn)分40分)
第一節(jié)(滿(mǎn)分15分)
假定你是李華，為迎接即將來(lái)訪(fǎng)的新西蘭姐妹學(xué)校的師生代表，學(xué)校將舉辦“戲劇工坊”(drama workshop)活動(dòng)。現(xiàn)向全校學(xué)生征集活動(dòng)的建議，請(qǐng)你給負(fù)責(zé)活動(dòng)的老師寫(xiě)一封郵件。內(nèi)容包括:1.寫(xiě)信目的;2.你的建議及具體安排。
注意:1.寫(xiě)作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右; 2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well.
Best regards, Li Hua
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to share some suggestions for the upcoming drama workshop to welcome the students and teachers from our sister school in New Zealand.
To begin with, we could initiate the workshop with interactive ice-breaker activities, allowing students to familiarize themselves with one another(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作). Following this, a session dedicated to basic acting techniques(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做后置定語(yǔ)), such as voice projection, body language, and improvisation, would be highly beneficial. Moreover, organizing students into small groups to prepare and perform short skits(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)) could foster teamwork and creativity. To conclude, a feedback session where students can share their thoughts and learning outcomes would be valuable.(定從)
I am confident that these activities will create an engaging and educational environment for all participants(賓從).
Best regards, Li Hua
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Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. She had her handwritten notes, some papers, and her memory. She could do this. The following week, Emma spent every waking hour reconstructing her project. The kitchen turned into a makeshift lab, notes scattered across the table(獨(dú)立主格). Her parents made sure she had snacks to keep her energy up(賓從). The night before the science fair, Emma finally finished her presentation. She knew it wasn't as polished as her original(賓從), but she had done her best(賓從). At the science fair, Emma stood by her project, feeling a mix of nervousness and hope(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)做伴隨動(dòng)作). As the judges made their rounds(狀從), she presented her findings with passion.
After the fair, the winners were to be announced. Emma held her breath as they called out the names. When the first-place winner was called, it wasn't her name. Disappointed but still proud of her efforts(adj做狀語(yǔ)或主語(yǔ)補(bǔ)語(yǔ)), Emma listened intently as they announced the second and third-place winners(狀從). To her surprise and joy, Emma was awarded third place. Her heart swelled with pride as she accepted her prize, knowing(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作) that despite the setbacks, she had proven her resilience and determination(賓從). This experience fueled Emma's passion for science even more, inspiring her to continue pursuing her dreams with even greater determination and perseverance(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做后置定語(yǔ)).

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