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Luis scanned the field. The soccer ball was tucked （盤帶） between his feet. He searched and searched until… there! His friend Nicholas was wide open. He passed the ball to Nicholas. Nicholas trapped the ball and swung his leg back, kicked, and…
GOAL!!! Luis leaped up and down, celebrating. Just then, Devon walked up, his face twisted in anger. Devon had started playing soccer during breaks with them a few weeks ago. He was a nice enough guy when he felt like things in the game had gone his way. But when he felt like they hadn’t, watch out.
“Why didn’t you pass the ball to me, Luis ” Devon shouted.
“Guy, you weren’t open. It’s just that simple.” Luis responded.
“I’m fast though!” Devon protested, his voice still loud and angry.
Luis ignored him. He didn’t like being dragged into arguments. So that’s what he did with Devon most of the time —just ignored him. It almost always worked.
“I don’t like the way that Devon talks after soccer,” Nicholas said. Luis looked up from his book. They took the same bus after school.
“What do you mean ” he asked as Nicholas sat down.
“He’s always yelling at people and bragging （吹噓） about himself.” Luis nodded. That was true. “It isn’t right,” Nicholas continued. “It makes soccer less fun. I want to tell him that he can’t play with us anymore. I already talked to all the other guys and they all agreed with me.” Nicholas said. His eyes were set in determination.
The bus started to slow down for Nicholas’ stop. Nicholas stood up, swinging his backpack back onto his shoulder. Luis watched as Nicholas ran off the bus. Although everyone had been getting a bit sick of Devon ruining soccer for a while, shutting him out seemed too extreme. He spent the rest of the ride trying to figure out what he should do.
注意：
1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
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The next day Luis asked Devon if he could talk with him. Devon kept playing soccer with them for the rest of the school year.
文章大意
文章講述了 Luis 和 Nicholas 等一群孩子在課間踢足球，Luis 傳球給 Nicholas 使其進球后，Devon 卻因未接到球而憤怒質(zhì)問 Luis。Devon 平時在比賽不如意時就會發(fā)火且愛吹噓自己，這讓大家對他有些不滿。Nicholas 向 Luis 表示想讓 Devon 退出球隊，因為他的行為影響了大家踢球的樂趣，且其他隊員也都同意這一想法。然而，Luis 覺得這樣做太極端，于是在第二天找 Devon 談話，希望他能意識到自己的問題并改正，而不是直接將他排斥在外。最終 Devon 認識到錯誤并做出改變，在接下來的一學(xué)期都和大家一起愉快地踢球，還為球隊做出了貢獻，整個團隊也變得更加團結(jié)。
伏筆及回應(yīng)：
伏筆：Devon 在比賽不如意時就會發(fā)火且愛吹噓，這為 Nicholas 提出不想讓他再一起踢球做鋪墊，也暗示了 Devon 的行為已經(jīng)引起了大家的反感。回應(yīng)：Luis 找 Devon 談話，直接指出他的問題，促使 Devon 認識到錯誤并改正，從而化解了團隊的危機，使情節(jié)得以轉(zhuǎn)折和發(fā)展。
伏筆：Luis 不喜歡卷入爭吵，所以大多數(shù)時候選擇忽視 Devon，這為他后來主動找 Devon 談話做對比，突出 Luis 為解決問題所做出的努力和改變。回應(yīng)：Luis 克服自己的習(xí)慣，主動與 Devon 溝通，展現(xiàn)了他的擔(dān)當(dāng)和解決問題的積極態(tài)度，推動故事向積極方向發(fā)展。
伏筆：Nicholas 與 Luis 同乘校車并交流對 Devon 的看法，且提到已和其他隊員商量好不讓 Devon 踢球，為 Luis 的思考和后續(xù)行動營造了緊張的氛圍，也促使 Luis 必須盡快做出決定。回應(yīng)：Luis 經(jīng)過思考后決定找 Devon 談話，而不是隨大流地排斥他，體現(xiàn)了 Luis 的善良和理性，同時也避免了團隊矛盾的進一步激化。
伏筆：Devon 雖然有不好的行為，但在比賽中仍積極參與，暗示他對足球的熱愛，為他后來愿意改正錯誤并繼續(xù)和大家踢球提供了內(nèi)在動力。回應(yīng)：Devon 在認識到自己的問題后，努力改正，并且在之后的比賽中為球隊做出貢獻，實現(xiàn)了從問題制造者到團隊貢獻者的轉(zhuǎn)變，深化了文章關(guān)于成長和團隊合作的主題。
伏筆：文章開頭描述的激烈足球比賽場景，以及 Luis 和 Nicholas 的默契配合，與 Devon 引發(fā)的矛盾形成對比，突出了團隊和諧的重要性，也為后來 Devon 改變后團隊更加團結(jié)做鋪墊。回應(yīng)：在 Devon 改變行為后，整個團隊重新找回了快樂和團結(jié)，比賽變得更加精彩，再次強調(diào)了良好人際關(guān)系和團隊氛圍對于活動的積極影響，升華了文章主旨。
續(xù)寫要點
第一段
情感線：Luis 起初有些緊張和忐忑，擔(dān)心 Devon 不接受他的建議甚至?xí)l(fā)更大的矛盾，但同時又懷著真誠和友善，希望能夠幫助 Devon 認識到問題并改善團隊氛圍。Devon 則從最初的驚訝、抵觸逐漸轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)樾呃⒑头此迹_始意識到自己的行為給大家?guī)淼牟涣加绊懀楦猩嫌辛嗣黠@的起伏和轉(zhuǎn)變。
故事線：詳細描述 Luis 如何鼓起勇氣找 Devon 談話，選擇的地點和時機，比如在課間操場的角落，趁其他同學(xué)不注意時。談話過程中，Luis 誠懇地指出 Devon 的問題，同時也表達了大家對他球技的認可和希望他留下來的意愿，例如 “我們都知道你球踢得不錯，也很想和你一起玩，但你的那些行為讓大家有些不開心”。Devon 的反應(yīng)從一開始的生氣反駁，如 “我怎么了，我只是表達自己的想法”，到后來逐漸沉默、低頭思考，展現(xiàn)出他內(nèi)心的掙扎和轉(zhuǎn)變，為下文他的改變做鋪墊。
主旨升華句：“True friendship is not about avoiding conflicts, but having the courage to face them and the kindness to help each other grow. In that quiet corner of the playground, we took the first step towards a better team and a stronger bond.”（真正的友誼不是逃避沖突，而是有勇氣去面對并以善良之心幫助彼此成長。在操場那個安靜的角落，我們朝著更好的團隊和更緊密的關(guān)系邁出了第一步。）
第二段
情感線：Devon 充滿感激和決心，感激 Luis 給他的機會，決心用實際行動來證明自己的改變，重新融入團隊。整個團隊則從之前的不滿和分裂傾向，轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)閷?Devon 的接納和支持，大家一起享受足球帶來的快樂，情感上更加和諧、積極，對團隊充滿熱愛和自豪。
故事線：講述 Devon 在后續(xù)比賽中的具體改變，如在進球后不再吹噓，而是和隊友們擁抱慶祝；在隊友失誤時，給予鼓勵而不是指責(zé)。可以描述一場關(guān)鍵比賽，Devon 發(fā)揮出色，幫助球隊取得勝利，隊友們紛紛為他歡呼的場景，“Devon 帶著球突破對方防線，一腳射門，球進了！全場沸騰，隊友們跑過來將他緊緊圍住，那一刻，我們不再是有矛盾的個體，而是一個團結(jié)的整體”。通過這些細節(jié)，體現(xiàn) Devon 的成長以及團隊的團結(jié)協(xié)作，最后點明這次經(jīng)歷對大家的重要意義，即學(xué)會了包容、理解和共同成長。
主旨升華句：“In the game of soccer and the game of life, we learned that everyone makes mistakes, but it's how we respond to them that defines us. By embracing change and forgiveness, we created a team that was not only stronger on the field but also in our hearts, united by the spirit of sportsmanship and friendship.”（在足球比賽和人生這場游戲中，我們明白了每個人都會犯錯，但我們對待錯誤的方式?jīng)Q定了我們的人生。通過接納改變和寬容，我們打造了一支不僅在球場上更強大，而且在內(nèi)心深處也更強大的團隊，被體育精神和友誼的力量緊緊相連。）
寫作示范一
The next day Luis asked Devon if he could talk with him. His heart was pounding as he approached Devon, who was kicking a stone around in the schoolyard. “Hey, Devon,” Luis said, trying to sound calm. Devon looked up, a bit startled. “Can we talk for a minute ” Luis continued. Devon shrugged and followed him to a secluded spot under a tree. Luis took a deep breath and began, “Devon, you know we all like playing soccer together, but lately, your behavior after the games has been a bit much. We just want to have fun and enjoy the sport.” Devon's eyes widened, and he opened his mouth to argue, but Luis held up his hand. “I know you don't mean to, but it makes it less enjoyable for everyone. We really want you to stay on the team, but you need to work on this.” Devon's face flushed, and he looked down at his feet. After a moment, he nodded. “I guess I didn't realize. I'll try to do better.”
Devon kept playing soccer with them for the rest of the school year. At the next game, everyone was a bit nervous about how Devon would act. But when he scored a goal, instead of bragging, he ran over to his teammates and high-fived them. The team cheered, and Luis felt a sense of relief. As the season progressed, Devon became a more positive presence. He encouraged his teammates during tough plays and was the first to offer a hand when someone fell. The team grew closer, and their games were filled with laughter and camaraderie. “True friendship is not about avoiding conflicts, but having the courage to face them and the kindness to help each other grow. In that quiet corner of the playground, we took the first step towards a better team and a stronger bond.”
寫作示范二
The next day Luis asked Devon if he could talk with him. He found Devon sitting alone on a bench, looking sullen. Luis walked over slowly and sat down beside him. “Devon, I want to talk to you about something important,” he said softly. Devon glanced at him warily. “I know you love soccer, and so do we. But the way you've been acting after the games has been causing some problems.” Luis paused, choosing his words carefully. “We don't want to exclude you, but we need to have a good time together.” Devon's expression softened, and he muttered, “I just get so caught up in the moment.” Luis nodded. “I understand, but we need to find a better way to handle it.” They talked for a while longer, and Devon promised to make an effort to change.
Devon kept playing soccer with them for the rest of the school year. In the following matches, Devon was a different player. He cheered for his teammates, offered constructive feedback, and was more focused on the team's success than his own glory. One particular game was tied in the final minutes, and Devon made a brilliant pass that led to the winning goal. The team erupted in celebration, and Devon was at the center of it, beaming with pride. This experience taught them all the value of communication, forgiveness, and teamwork. “In the game of soccer and the game of life, we learned that everyone makes mistakes, but it's how we respond to them that defines us. By embracing change and forgiveness, we created a team that was not only stronger on the field but also in our hearts, united by the spirit of sportsmanship and friendship.”
參考答案
The next day Luis asked Devon if he could talk with him. Luis explained how everyone enjoyed his contribution to the game, but his reactions when things didn't go his way were becoming a problem. Luis added,"The other guys said that if you keep yelling at them, then they want to shut you out." At first, Devon's brows furrowed, but slowly, his expression softened as he listened. At break that day, Luis hurried out onto the field, told Nicholas what he'd told Devon and asked Nicholas to give Devon a chance.
Devon kept playing soccer with them for the rest of the school year: He made an effort to curb his temper and even started apologizing if he caught himself getting too aggressive. It wasn't perfect immediately, but everyone noticed the change. Gradually, Devon began to celebrate others' successes as much as his own and his fits of anger became rare. Luis felt proud of himself for finding a way to include Devon. And the games became more enjoyable for everyone involved.

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