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四川省瀘州市高2022級第一次教學質量診斷性考試英語
第四部分 寫作（共兩節，滿分40分）
第一節（滿分15分）
假定你將參加學校組織的英語征文比賽，主題是“Our Land，Our Future”。請你用英語寫一篇短文，內容包括：
1．土地的重要性；2．保護土地的建議。
注意：
1．寫作詞數應為80左右；
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Our Land,Our Future
第二節 讀后續寫（滿分25分）
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
In a quiet little town, there was a small park where children would laugh and play. In the center of this park stood a wooden swing set. Among the children, a nine-year-old girl named Lily had a special bond with this swing. Every day after school, she would rush to the park, her backpack bouncing against her back, and spend hours soaring through the air, her laughter mingling with the wind.
Lily's best friend, Ethan, was a boy who lived next door. They were inseparable, sharing secrets, dreams, and endless adventures. Often, you would find them on those swings, their feet barely touching the ground, their imaginations taking them far beyond the confines of the playground. They dreamed of becoming astronauts, traveling to outer space, and discovering new worlds together.
One sunny afternoon, Lily tested the limits of the swing. With a determined push, Ethan soared high, feeling the thrill as the swing reached its top. "Look, Lily! I'm flying!" Ethan shouted, his laughter ringing through the air. But not far from the park, his parents watched them with great concerns. There was an uneasy tension growing. When Ethan came down from the swing, his parents rushed to the swing and took him home immediately.
Later that evening, Lily cried on the couch, her tears staining the fabric. "Mom, Ethan said he would not play with me anymore. Why " she asked, worry pooling in her blue eyes. Her mother took a deep breath, but the words seemed to be trapped in her throat. "I'm not sure, sweetie. He... He might be leaving for a while.”
Days turned into weeks, and the park felt emptier without Ethan's laughter. Each swing back and forth felt like a reminder of their vanished adventures. With every passing day, Lily's heart sank deeper into confusion and sorrow. She hoped that he would return, refusing to accept that he might not come back again.
注意：
1．續寫詞數應為150左右；
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1
Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him.
Paragraph 2
The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected.
第二節 讀后續寫（滿分25分）
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
In a quiet little town, there was a small park where children would laugh and play(定從). In the center of this park stood a wooden swing set(完全倒裝). Among the children, a nine-year-old girl named Lily(非謂語動詞作后置定語) had a special bond with this swing. Every day after school, she would rush to the park, her backpack bouncing against her back(獨立主格), and spend hours soaring through the air, her laughter mingling with the wind(獨立主格).
Lily's best friend, Ethan, was a boy who lived next door. They were inseparable, sharing secrets, dreams, and endless adventures(非謂語動詞作伴隨動作). Often, you would find them on those swings, their feet barely touching the ground(獨立主格), their imaginations taking them far beyond the confines of the playground(獨立主格). They dreamed of becoming astronauts, traveling to outer space, and discovering new worlds together.
One sunny afternoon, Lily tested the limits of the swing. With a determined push, Ethan soared high, feeling the thrill(非謂語動詞作伴隨動作) as the swing reached its top(狀從). "Look, Lily! I'm flying!" Ethan shouted, his laughter ringing through the air(獨立主格). But not far from the park, his parents watched them with great concerns. There was an uneasy tension growing. When Ethan came down from the swing(狀從), his parents rushed to the swing and took him home immediately.
Later that evening, Lily cried on the couch, her tears staining the fabric(獨立主格). "Mom, Ethan said he would not play with me anymore(賓從). Why " she asked, worry pooling in her blue eyes(獨立主格). Her mother took a deep breath, but the words seemed to be trapped in her throat. "I'm not sure, sweetie. He... He might be leaving for a while.”
Days turned into weeks, and the park felt emptier without Ethan's laughter. Each swing back and forth felt like a reminder of their vanished adventures. With every passing day, Lily's heart sank deeper into confusion and sorrow. She hoped that he would return(賓從), refusing to accept(非謂語動詞作伴隨動作) that he might not come back again(賓從).
注意：
1．續寫詞數應為150左右；
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him.
Paragraph 2: The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected.
1. 高考讀后續寫分析
（1）文章類型分析
這篇文章屬于情感延續型讀后續寫。文章描述了Lily和Ethan的深厚友誼，然而，由于Ethan的父母的干預，Lily失去了這個朋友。續寫部分需要續寫Lily在失落中的情感反應及她的行動，并通過進一步的發展，恢復和升華Lily和Ethan的友誼。
（2）思路構思
情感發展：文章的前半部分詳細描述了Lily對Ethan失聯的悲傷和困惑。續寫應該關注Lily如何從悲傷中走出，采取行動恢復這段友誼，并在情感上獲得轉折和升華。
情節延續：續寫的情節應該保持平和的情感延續，同時盡量讓故事的結局富有溫暖和正能量。Lily的決定去寫信反映出她的堅強和對友誼的渴望，而Ethan的回歸則代表著情感的修復和希望的回升。
布局與框架：
第一段：
情感過渡：寫Lily在悲傷和迷茫中做出的決定—寫信給Ethan。通過這個行為，展現她依然不放棄友誼的堅定信念。
行動描寫：詳細描寫Lily寫信的情景，展現她的情感波動。
第二段：
情感恢復：描述Ethan回到公園的情景。通過Ethan的歸來，體現友誼的恢復，以及Lily內心的喜悅和釋然。
結局溫暖：通過回到公園的簡單行動，給故事一個溫馨的結尾，帶出“友誼的力量”這一主題。
（3）承接原文的事項
情感延續：續寫應保持對Lily和Ethan情感的真實還原。尤其是Lily的情感波動應細膩描寫，從傷心到接受，再到最終通過行動恢復友情。
情節平穩過渡：續寫應自然地過渡到Lily寫信并等待的情節，同時Ethan的歸來應及時、自然，不突兀。
（4）整體注意事項
語氣溫暖：續寫要保持溫暖和積極的語氣，避免過于悲傷的語氣，以符合高考寫作的情感表達要求。
細節描寫：細膩的動作、心理和環境描寫有助于深化情感表現，讓人物性格更加豐滿。
情感層次：通過細膩的情感描寫，表達從痛苦到恢復的心路歷程，展現Lily堅韌的性格。
動作描寫：
1. Lily carefully picked up the pen, her hand trembling slightly as she began to write her letter.
2. She stood by the swing, staring at it for a moment before swinging herself gently, as if waiting for Ethan to return.
3. Ethan walked into the park, his gaze searching for Lily, his hands nervously clutching the letter she had sent him.
心理描寫：
1. Lily’s heart pounded as she wrote the letter, each word filled with hope and sadness.
2. When Ethan returned, Lily felt as if a heavy weight had been lifted off her shoulders, her heart soaring with joy.
3. As the letter took shape, Lily could feel her tears blurring the ink, but she knew she had to send it, no matter what.
環境描寫：
1. The park was quiet that day, the empty swings swaying gently in the breeze, as if waiting for the laughter that once filled the air.
2. The sun began to set, casting a golden glow over the park as Lily stood there, holding her letter, her thoughts consumed by Ethan.
3. The park felt alive again when Ethan returned, the familiar sounds of laughter and chatter echoing as if nothing had changed.
Trembling (adj.) — 顫抖的
近義詞：shaking, quivering
反義詞：steady, calm
例句：
1. Lily's hand was trembling as she reached for the letter.
2. His voice was trembling with emotion as he spoke.
Soar (v.) — 飛翔，激增
近義詞：fly, rise
反義詞：sink, drop
例句：
1. Lily’s heart soared when she saw Ethan walking towards her.
2. The bird soared above the trees, its wings outstretched.
Relief (n.) — 放心，寬慰
近義詞：comfort, reassurance
反義詞：anxiety, worry
例句：
1. A sense of relief washed over her as Ethan walked into the park.
2. The news brought relief to everyone, knowing that the search was over.
2. 語法現象分析
（1）高中語法現象
過去完成時：“Ethan had come down from the swing” — 表示Ethan在過去某個時間之前的動作，強調動作的完成，突出時間先后順序。
現在完成時：“Lily’s heart has been sinking” — 表示從過去到現在的情感狀態持續，強調情感的延續性。
定語從句：“The park where children would laugh and play” — 修飾名詞“park”，描述了公園的特征。
（2）常見搭配與短語
Soar high：飛得很高（例如，“Ethan soared high on the swing.”）。
Take shape：形成，逐漸成型（例如，“The letter began to take shape as she wrote.”）。
Tear up：流淚（例如，“Lily’s eyes filled with tears as she wrote the letter.”）。
Possible Answer 1:
Paragraph 1: Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him. She sat down at the kitchen table, the pen in her hand trembling slightly(獨立主格). With each word, her heart felt lighter, and her hope grew stronger. She poured all her feelings into the letter, expressing her sadness and the longing for their adventures to continue(非謂語動詞作伴隨動作).
Paragraph 2: The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected. His face lit up when he saw Lily(狀從), and she ran towards him, her heart soaring with relief(獨立主格). Without a word, they both sat on the swing, side by side, their laughter returning to the park(獨立主格), as if nothing had ever changed(狀從).
Possible Answer 2:
Paragraph 1: Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him. She knew she couldn’t wait forever(賓從). With a determined breath, she began writing, each sentence filled with love and hope for their friendship(獨立主格). The ink blurred slightly with her tears, but she didn’t mind.
Paragraph 2: The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected. He had a sheepish smile on his face, holding the letter in his hand(非謂語動詞做伴隨動詞). Lily’s heart swelled with joy as they hugged each other tightly(狀從), the swings waiting for them to take flight once more(獨立主格).
Possible Answer 3:
Paragraph 1: Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him. She wasn’t sure if it would work(賓從), but she had to try. Her hand shook as she wrote(as狀從), but she felt a sense of calm wash over her as the letter took shape(as狀從). She asked him to come back to the park, to share their dreams again.
Paragraph 2: The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected. His eyes searched for Lily, and when he saw her(狀從), he smiled. Without a word, they both jumped onto the swings, and the sound of their laughter filled the air once again.
Possible Answer 官方:
Our Land, Our Future
Land is the cornerstone of our existence. It not only provides us with bountiful food but also shelters numerous species. However, it's under threat from various sources.
To safeguard our land(目的狀語), we can start with small actions. For instance, reducing waste and reusing materials(動名詞短語做主語) can cut down the need for excessive landfills. Additionally, we should advocate for sustainable farming methods to maintain soil fertility(目的狀語).
Each one of us holds the key to land protection. Let's join hands and ensure a thriving future for our land and all its inhabitants.
第二節 讀后續寫（滿分25分）
Paragraph 1
Eventually, Lily decided to write a letter to him. She poured out her heart on the paper, expressing how much she missed their time together on the swings, their shared dreams, and how empty the park felt without him(賓從). She asked him if she had done something wrong and begged him to come back(賓從). She sealed the letter and left it at Ethan's doorstep, hoping it would reach his heart(非謂語動詞+賓從). Then, she waited anxiously, spending each day checking the park and Ethan's house(非謂語動詞作伴隨動作), but there was no sign of him. Doubt and worry filled her mind, but she still held onto a glimmer of hope that he would respond.
Paragraph 2
The next day, Ethan showed up in the park as expected. His eyes were red as if he had been crying. He ran to Lily and hugged her tightly. He told her that his parents were worried about his safety on the swing(賓從), but he missed her so much. They both promised to be more careful and continue their adventures, their friendship stronger than ever. After that, they sat on the swings, recalling the happy memories and sharing the things(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作) that had happened during the separation(定從). The sun shone brightly above them, as if blessing their restored friendship(狀從).

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