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讀后續寫：女孩與母親吵架后重歸于好
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Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily. She couldn’t help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scolding(責備) from her mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat, but it was not even possible for her, since she had nothing with her. She stood beside a stand for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she sighed and had to leave.
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked, “Hey, girl, you want to have the noodles ”
“Oh, yes… but I don’t have money on me” she replied.
“That’s nothing. I’ll treat you today,”said the man, “come in.”
The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, whose smell was so attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cried silently.
“What is it ” asked the man kindly.
“Nothing, actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears, “Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother, drove me out of the house. She showed no care for me. She is so merciless compared to a stranger!”
Hearing the words, the seller smiled “Girl, do you really think so I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can your number the times she cooked for you Have you expressed your gratitude to her ”
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shock; she remembered mother’s familiar face and weathered hands. “Why did I not think of that A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel indebted, but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me.”
On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.
Paragraph 1: Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. ____________________________________________
Paragraph 2: A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. ________________________________________________
一、文章主旨大意
文章主要講述了珍妮與母親吵架后離家出走，在饑餓無助時得到一位攤主的幫助，攤主的話讓她意識到母親平時對自己默默付出的愛與關懷被自己忽視，從而決定回家向母親道歉的故事。主旨在于通過珍妮的經歷，引發人們對親情的思考，提醒人們不要忽視身邊親人給予的愛，要懂得感恩與珍惜。
二、伏筆
1. 開頭提到珍妮與母親吵架后離家，這為后面她在外面經歷的種種以及思想的轉變埋下伏筆，因為這次離家出走是她反思親情的契機。
2. 描寫珍妮看到攤主生意忙碌，為攤主免費給她提供面條這一情節做鋪墊，突出攤主的善良，同時也與后面攤主對珍妮的勸導形成對比，進一步凸顯親情的珍貴。
三、續寫要點
第一段： - 描述珍妮在門口的緊張心理，如心跳加速、猶豫是否要敲門等細節。 - 寫出珍妮進門后看到母親的場景，比如母親可能正在焦急地踱步或者坐在沙發上黯然神傷等。 - 珍妮鼓起勇氣向母親道歉，表達自己的悔意和對母親的感激。
第二段： - 母親對珍妮的反應，可能是欣慰、激動地落淚并擁抱珍妮。 - 可以描寫母女和解后的溫馨場景，如一起坐在沙發上談心，或者母親為珍妮準備食物等。 - 最后要體現出珍妮通過這次經歷深刻體會到了親情的珍貴，升華主題，如她決定以后要更加珍惜母親，多關心母親等。
四、情節線
1. 開端：珍妮與母親發生爭吵，一氣之下離家出走。她在街頭漫無目的地游蕩了幾個小時后，感到饑餓，站在一個小吃攤旁，雖渴望食物卻因身無分文只能無奈離開。
2. 發展：小吃攤攤主注意到珍妮，主動請她吃了一碗面條。珍妮吃面時因攤主的 kindness 而感動落淚，并向攤主傾訴母親將她趕出家門的事，攤主聽后對珍妮進行勸導，提醒她母親多年的養育之恩。
3. 高潮：珍妮聽了攤主的話后，內心受到極大觸動，意識到自己對母親的忽視與不感恩，在回家路上便下定決心向母親道歉。
4. 結局：珍妮走到家門口，深呼吸后敲門，母親開門，珍妮道歉，母親原諒了她，隨后母女倆和解并進行了交流，珍妮決定從此珍惜母親，珍視親情。
五、情感線
1. 珍妮與母親吵架后離家時：充滿憤怒與委屈，對母親的責罵心懷不滿，這種情緒驅使她逃離家庭環境。
2. 在街頭饑餓無助時：除了身體上的饑餓感，還有內心的失落與孤獨，看到小吃攤食物卻無法擁有時，增添了無奈之情。
3. 得到攤主幫助時：對攤主充滿感激，因一碗免費的面條而感動落淚，同時也因攤主的話開始對母親的行為有了新的思考，內心逐漸產生愧疚。
4. 回家路上：愧疚感愈發強烈，堅定了向母親道歉的決心，意識到自己過去的錯誤，對母親的情感由之前的憤怒轉為深深的自責與懊悔。
5. 到家與母親交流時：緊張又誠懇地道歉，得到母親原諒后，感受到母親的愛與包容，內心充滿溫暖與對親情的珍惜，情感得到升華，從自我反思上升到對親情本質的深刻理解與珍視。
六、主題升華句
1. Family love is like a quietly burning flame that gives us endless warmth in ordinary days, yet we often forget it while chasing the lights in the distance.親情是那默默燃燒的火焰，在平凡的日子里給予我們無盡的溫暖，我們卻常常在追逐遠方的光亮時將它遺忘。
2. A mother's love is like a trickling stream. Although it is silent, it can converge into a vast ocean in the desert of the soul and nourish us throughout our lives.母親的愛如同涓涓細流，雖無聲無息，卻能在心靈的荒漠中匯聚成浩瀚的海洋，滋潤我們一生。
3. Home is always the harbor of the soul, and a mother's embrace is the safest berth. No matter how stormy it is, we should never get lost in the outside world and forget this deep affection. 家，永遠是心靈的港灣，母親的懷抱是最安全的停靠，無論風雨如何，我們都不應迷失在外面的世界而忘卻這份深情。
4. Gratitude is not just in words, but in truly understanding the efforts of our loved ones with our hearts and repaying that selfless love with actions, so that the flower of family love will always be brilliant.感恩并非只在言語之間，而是要用真心去體會親人的付出，用行動去回報那無私的愛，讓親情之花永遠絢爛。
5. True love is not a momentary emotion, but something that can withstand the test of ordinary years in the long river of time. A mother's love is so profound and lasting. 真正的愛不是一時的感動，而是在歲月的長河中，經得起平淡流年的考驗，母親的愛便是如此深沉而持久。
續寫范文
The First Version
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. Her heart was pounding wildly as if it wanted to break free from her chest. She raised her hand, paused in mid-air for a few seconds, and then finally mustered the courage to knock. The door opened almost immediately, and there stood her mother, her eyes red and swollen, evidently from crying. Jenny's throat tightened, and she stammered, "Mom, I'm so sorry. I shouldn't have run away and said those awful things. You've always been there for me, cooking countless meals, taking care of me when I was sick, and I took it all for granted. I was wrong."
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. Jenny looked up and saw her mother's tear-streaked face. Her mother pulled her into a warm and tight embrace, whispering, "It's okay, honey. I'm just glad you're back." They stood there for a long time, holding each other. Later, they sat on the couch, and Jenny shared with her mother everything that had happened, including the kind vendor's words. From that day on, Jenny made a promise to herself that she would cherish every moment with her mother, show her love and gratitude more often, and never let a petty quarrel come between them again. Because she knew that the love of a mother was the most precious gift in the world, and it deserved to be treasured with all her heart.
The Second Version
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. She could hear her own heart thumping loudly in her ears. Her hand trembled slightly as she reached for the doorknob. As she entered, she saw her mother sitting in the dimly lit living room, her face haggard and weary. Jenny walked slowly towards her, her steps heavy with guilt. "Mom," she said softly, "I'm back. I'm so sorry for what I did. I was so blind and ungrateful. You've given me so much love and care all these years, and I repaid you with rudeness."
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. Jenny looked into her mother's eyes, which were filled with a mixture of relief and love. Her mother cupped her face in her hands and said, "My dear, I was so worried about you. I'm just glad you're safe." They hugged each other tightly, and in that embrace, all the anger and hurt melted away. Jenny realized that this was the place where she truly belonged, and that her mother's love was an unbreakable bond. From then on, she made it a point to be more patient and understanding with her mother, knowing that every moment spent with her was a precious gift. Because in the end, it was the love of family that could heal all wounds and make one whole again.

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