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讀后續寫之親情類：圣誕節男子與多年未見的祖母重逢 講義
讀后續寫
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
The heavy snow continued outside. It was the week before Christmas. The evening receptionist who was scheduled to relieve me had phoned to say she had been unable to get her car started. Why was I the unlucky one stuck behind a receptionist’s desk
Suddenly, my thought was interrupted by the ringing of the telephone. Answering a little unhappily, I heard a man’s voice. “Is this Avis Car Rental ”
“No, I’m afraid our phone number here at the assisted living facility is one digit different than Avis. Let me give you that number so you don’t have to look it up again,” I finished giving the gentleman the number, wishing him a Merry Christmas. Just as I was about to hang up, I heard his voice in midair.
“Wait a minute, please! Do you believe in miracles ”
I sat straighter in my chair, surprised at such a question from a total stranger.
“Definitely. Why do you ask ”
“I’ll try to make a long story short. My parents recently passed away in a car accident. I have no one left in the world but a grandmother somewhere in Virginia who I haven’t seen since I was little. My uncle placed my grandmother in an assisted living facility when he grew too ill to care for her any longer. Unfortunately, he’s gone to heaven as well. Do you happen to have Grace Sheperd at your facility ”
My heart beat faster as I recognized the familiar name.
“Are you still there ” he asked finally.
“Yes. I’m afraid there’s a privacy policy that prohibits me from answering.”
“I understand,” the young man sounded so sad. “Thank you for your time, and Merry Christmas!”
“Wait! Virginia is a beautiful state to visit at Christmas time! Let me give you our address in case you happen to be traveling through our area any time soon...” I added.
“Thank you!” the young man said before he hung up.
注意：
1.續寫詞數應為150左右；
2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應位置作答。
The next day when I was passing Grace Shepard’s room, I suddenly froze in place.
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The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me.
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以下是對這篇文章從幾個方面進行的分析：
一、主旨大意
文章講述了在圣誕節前一周的一個雪天，身為接待員的“我”在值班時接到一位陌生男子的電話，他誤將養老機構電話當作租車公司電話撥打過來。男子傾訴了自己的身世，親人相繼離世，只剩未曾謀面已久的在弗吉尼亞某養老機構的祖母。“我”雖因隱私政策無法告知他其祖母是否在此，但巧妙地給了他養老機構地址。最終男子得以和祖母團聚，體現了在特殊的節日氛圍下，人與人之間的善意相助促成了溫暖的家庭重逢的故事。
二、伏筆
1 陌生男子詢問“我”是否相信奇跡，為后文他真的找到祖母并實現團聚這一如同奇跡般的情節埋下伏筆，引發讀者對后續發展的好奇。
2 “我”在電話中違反常規地給了男子養老機構的地址，看似不經意的舉動，實則為后文男子能夠前來與祖母相聚埋下伏筆，暗示了故事可能會朝著溫暖團聚的方向發展。
三、續寫要點
第一段續寫要點：要描述“我”看到男子和祖母相聚的場景，展現出祖母的喜悅以及男子的溫情，突出重逢這一刻的溫馨氛圍，比如通過對人物的動作、神態描寫來體現。
第二段續寫要點：需刻畫男子對“我”表達感激之情的具體表現，如言語、神態等，同時要從“我”的角度表達出內心的溫暖感受，以及這件事在這個特殊的圣誕時節所帶來的特別意義，進一步升華故事的情感。
四、主題升華句
1. On this cold and snowy day, an accidental phone call, with a little kindness passed along, led to a heartwarming family reunion, filling the approaching Christmas with deep affection.
在這個寒冷的雪天，一次偶然的電話連線，卻因著那一點點善意的傳遞，成就了一份溫暖至極的家庭重逢，讓這個即將到來的圣誕節充滿了濃濃的溫情。
2. Sometimes, a small act, like giving an address, might bridge the gap of time and space, reunite separated relatives, and show how brilliantly the kindness of human nature shines.
有時候，一個小小的舉動，如給出一個地址，或許就能跨越時空的隔閡，讓失散的親人再度相聚，讓我們看到人性的善良是如此熠熠生輝。
3. Despite the restrictions of the privacy policy, that bit of care that broke the norm, like the warm sun in winter, not only illuminated the man's way of finding his relatives but also filled the nursing home with the air of love on this Christmas Eve.
盡管有隱私政策的限制，但那一絲突破常規的關懷，如同冬日里的暖陽，不僅照亮了男子尋親的路，更讓這個圣誕前夕的養老機構洋溢著愛的氣息。
4. The inquiry about miracles on the other end of the phone and the kind response on this end jointly wove a warm picture, proving that even in the face of the hardships of life, the warm help among people can always create wonderful miracles.
電話那端的詢問奇跡，電話這端的善意回應，共同編織出了一幅溫暖的畫面，證明了即使在生活的苦難面前，人與人之間的溫情相助總能創造出美好的奇跡。
5. The story that happened on this snowy day tells us that every inadvertent act of kindness can become a beam of light in someone else's life. On a special occasion like Christmas, it kindles the long-lost family affection and makes love bloom again.
這個雪天發生的故事告訴我們，每一個不經意的善舉都可能成為他人生命中的一束光，在圣誕節這樣的特殊時刻，點亮那份失落已久的親情，讓愛重新綻放。
五、故事線
開端：圣誕節前一周的雪天，值班接待員因同事車故障而堅守崗位，接到陌生男子誤撥的電話。
發展：男子傾訴身世，詢問祖母下落，“我”因隱私政策無法告知但給了地址。
高潮：第二天“我”路過祖母房間看到男子和祖母相聚的場景。
結局：男子向“我”表達感激，“我”內心溫暖，感受到這份重逢在圣誕時節的特殊意義。
六、情感線
“我”的情感：開始接到電話時有些不耐煩，聽到男子身世后轉為同情，給出地址時懷著希望能幫到他的心情，看到男子和祖母相聚時內心充滿喜悅和溫暖，最后因男子的感激而深感這份善舉的意義重大。
男子的情感：打電話時的迷茫、無助與悲傷，得到地址后的期待，見到祖母時的激動、喜悅與溫情，向“我”表達感激時的誠摯。
Possible Version:
The First Version:
The next day when I was passing Grace Sheperd’s room, I suddenly froze in place. Through the half-open door, I saw a young man sitting beside an old lady, their hands clasped tightly. Grace Sheperd was beaming with a happiness I had seldom seen. The young man was speaking softly, his face filled with affection and a tinge of sadness. It was clear that he was the grandson who had called last night. I couldn't help but smile, realizing that a miracle was indeed happening right before my eyes.
The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me. His eyes were moist with tears of joy and gratitude. “Thank you,” he said, his voice choked with emotion. “You gave me the chance to reunite with my grandmother. This is the best Christmas gift I could ever receive.” I told him it was fate that brought them together. As I walked away, I felt a warm glow in my heart, knowing that I had played a small part in this heartwarming family reunion during the Christmas season.
The Second Version:
The next day when I was passing Grace Sheperd’s room, I suddenly froze in place. Inside the room, the young man was leaning over Grace, his eyes filled with a mixture of tenderness and disbelief. Grace was patting his hand gently, her wrinkled face lit up with an ecstatic smile that made her look years younger. The room seemed to be filled with intangible warmth, as if the long-lost bond between them had instantly rekindled. The young man was showing Grace some old family photos from his wallet, and they were both laughing and crying at the same time, lost in the precious memories of the past that had been dormant for so long.
The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me. His steps were a bit unsteady, as if he was still in a daze from the overwhelming emotion. Tears glistened in his eyes as he said, “You have no idea what this means to me. I thought I was all alone in the world, but now...” He paused, unable to continue for a moment. “This is truly a Christmas miracle, and you are the angel who made it possible.” I felt a lump in my throat and replied, “It was fate that brought you two together. This season is all about love and reunion, and I'm just glad to have witnessed such a beautiful moment.” As he thanked me again and again, I realized that this small act of mine had not only reunited a family but also filled my heart with an indescribable sense of joy and fulfillment that would stay with me long after this Christmas had passed.

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