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讀后續(xù)寫：人與社會（如何通過與他人的協(xié)作，為社會做點貢獻）講義
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閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
I was doing homework with my friend Ollie at his home when he randomly started scribbling （亂畫）a fish. But not just any fish. This fish was riding a skateboard and blowing a bubble that said “ I’d rather be skating!” I laughed and drew a sea star saying “Quit fooling around and get to work!”
Just then, Ollie’s grandma Abuela and her friend Mr. Goldberg came into the kitchen. Mr. Goldberg was in charge of the local animal shelter. Abuela poured their tea and inquired about how things were going at the animal shelter. Mr. Goldberg sighed, shaking his head. He explained that not enough people were adopting pets, resulting in too many animals without homes.
Overhearing the conversation, Ollie offered to adopt some excitedly. But Abuela said that one noisy parrot was plenty for this house. “Blue isn’t noisy,” defended Ollie. “He’s just musical.”
“I’d have a whole farm full of animals if I could,” I said. “But my parents say two cats and a hamster（倉鼠）are enough.”
Mr. Goldberg said he kept trying to attract people to adopt animals, but found it hard to get people’s attention these days. Ollie drew a sad whale, and I wrote the words “Please adopt me” in the shape of a whale spout（噴水）. Mr. Goldberg took a look at our drawings and made favorable comments on them, saying that these clever talking animals just might grab people’s attention. And he asked us if we were willing to design a poster for his animal shelter, a proposal we happily accepted. We decided to draw some ideas on our own and meet up again the next afternoon.
That night, when I was sitting in the living room brainstorming ideas for the poster, my little brother brought in our hamster, Mr. Nibbles, to give him a little run – around time. He made a hamster playground out of couch pillows and Mr. Nibbles began to run around merrily.
注意：
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Suddenly, an idea formed in my mind. ______________________
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We decided to make both Mr. Nibbles and Blue the stars of the poster.
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寫作分析
1. 主要人物:
①I
②Ollie
③Abuela: Ollie’s grandma
④Mr. Goldberg: ABuela’s friend, in charge of the local animal shelter
⑤Mr. Nibbles: our hamster
⑥Blue: Ollie’s pet parrot
2. 視角：第一人稱
3. 主題：人與社會（如何通過與他人的協(xié)作，為社會做點貢獻）
4. 突出點：
如何為動物收留站設計一份呼吁人們收養(yǎng)動物的海報
5. 前文故事梗概:
為了讓更多的人收養(yǎng)被遺棄的動物，Mr. Goldberg請我和Ollie為他的動物收留站畫一張海報。于是，我們欣然答應。我跟Ollie商量，先各自想點子，然后第二天下午再碰面討論。……
6.續(xù)寫安排:
第一段: Suddenly, an idea formed in my mind.
①（與前一句銜接）到底是怎樣的idea
②（過渡）我和Ollie分別做了些什么
③（承上啟下）最終我們的想法是什么
第二段: We decided to make both Mr. Nibbles and Blue the stars of the poster.
①（與前一句銜接）我們一起做了些什么
②（過渡）Mr. Goldberg有什么看法
③（收尾）結果如何
下水文
Suddenly, an idea formed in my mind. Our lovely and naughty hamster, Mr. Nibbles could be fit for the role, who absolutely would bring more people to show concern about adopting animals. Recalling the funny ways Mr. Nibbles had acted, I began to draw the figure based on him, adding the words “Lovely and wise pets! You won’t resist!”. The next afternoon, just as what I had thought of, Ollie came with his musical parrot, Blue, singing soulfully, trying to persuade people to adopt one from the animal shelter. After a heated discussion, we eventually came to the agreement on the draft of the poster. (98 words)
We decided to make both Mr. Nibbles and Blue the stars of the poster. Considering the advantages of Mr. Nibbles and Blue, we had our final design of the poster, in which we had a vivid eye-catching scene inviting people to adopt the animals enthusiastically. We couldn’t wait to show it to Mr. Goldberg, all the way running to him. The moment seeing the poster, he gave us a great thumb, praising us for our hard work and creation. Weeks later, there came the good news that lots of animals in the animal shelter found their homes. And for the first time we had a good taste of the delectation of cooperation. (98 words)

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